Interesting story, with some dark background of what happen in that ''breakup''
Well, is good story and i hope to see more in the nearly future!

You will going to gain more experience, and i'm sure that you'll be a better writer!
CONGRATULATIONS!

I think it needs more details, maybe 3 more chapters to elaborate more why exactly did they break up and you can also use it end the story properly because for me it was a cliffhanger.

Nonetheless, good story.

That was dark and sad. I liked it. Although I think it needed more. The details of the breakup were too vague, and you needed to show more of her journey, from I'm better off without him, to I have to get him back right now.

Man, what happened to you lately?