Your grammar and writing style is alright, but plot development is rushed and unrealistic. She got over the earthquake too quickly and did not seem scared of the strange male in her house. Other than obvious reasons of why he is a danger to her safety, you’ve also made her a nurse out of nowhere (see, this doesn’t fit because she has physical survival skills but lacks mental survival skills seeing as she didn’t attack, run away, or scream when she saw him at first) so she can have an intimate random moment with Legolas. The role reversal is surreal. You made him scared of her, and there is little justification for it. Then there’s the introduction you wrote for him. I disagree with the way you did it; it’s out of character for Legolas to reveal the name of his father because he prefers not to be known as a prince. The King of Greenwood/Mirkwood’s name is known well enough to be a way to identify his royal status. Even if it isn’t recognized, he shows in the movies (where he honestly gets more lines, at least in The Hobbit cinematic trilogy) that he wishes to leave his identity behind and travel anonymously.

I stopped reading a little after he introduced himself, but I hope you didn’t make her day end with her focused on a “mysterious and beautiful elf” when she has trouble being taken seriously at her job. I cannot enjoy the plot even if you write it well. The plot itself is the problem here, so I hope you understand this review and work on it in the future. Have a nice day.

Miscarriages are common but not to be taken lightly.
The strategy with the orcs was too poor. She should have stayed over the horses ready to run if thing went south. Also the warriors are supposed to count the number that they are going to fight and then check that they killed that same no.

ohh the ending of this has me laughing and crying XD

Hi there! Reading this amazing story for the fourth or fifth time. I don't know if you are currently active around here but I wanted to send you a hug and my thanks for writing this. I started my own story thanks to this one.

omg you made me cry and all other emotions possible... gah!

does Legolas ever get badly hurt? doesn't seem like it though. no offense meant

thranduil seeing legolas and maya kiss probably took quite the toll on him

This is so weird!

Okay, so one little detail I'd like to point out to you, not sure if you noticed, but you keep using "stealth" instead of "stealthy". Just thought you might want to know. otherwise, it's amazing! Love your work

Just reread this wonderful story of of your! Loved every word! Thank You!

This story was amazing! I can't believe I finished the entire thing! I love it when fanfics have super fluffy, perfect endings like this one!
THE FEELS *cries tears of happiness*

I'm lying on the ground dying of laughter!
This chapter kills me! XD
Send help immediately!

Normally LegolasxOC stories annoy me beacuse they're so overdone...
But this fanfic is amazing! I am getting very attached to Maya, and she and Legolas are so cute! I also love the side characters! They are really fun as well.
Keep up the good work!

I really love this story.
It's a perfect fic.
Thank you so much for all.

Love this story. Thank you.