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Kaito is hungry wants to eat

I am looking forward to the next chapter!

You spelled Ann's name wrong in one of the first few paragraphs, and you also forgot to capitalize Momo's name.
Elderly people with pyrokinetic powers? I can just picture this scene...
[Old man] Hey! Get off my lawn, you juvenile delinquents!
[Teenagers] It's that crazy old man again! Whatcha gonna do? Huh?
[Old man] *throws huge fireball*
Oh dear.
Also, I noticed quite a few more typos scattered throughout the chapter. I'm too lazy to list them all, but you might want to go through it again. Carefully, this time. And you spelled "defenseless" wrong.
Oh, and I WILL kill for the cameo thing. Don't worry. *smiles sweetly and innocently*

I'm just kidding! It was all my fault anyways. Well technically it was the hotel's fault for only having one broadband and telling us we had to pay money for the WiFi, but still. Will Runa be able to appear in the next chapter? I can just imagine her trying to blow Ryoma and Momo sky-high. Oh wait. I think I just gave a spoiler!
Rambunctious, your cameo is seriously giving me the willies. You didn't say she was so...creepy, Uninvited!

Don't use many OCs, especially if they're main characters. it gets confusing and hard to follow when cannon has so many characters with fannon ones on top of that. They are already a lot to pick from.

Mwahahaha... I thought you knew that I was secretly a spelling nazi! XD Nah, it's okay. I won't check for you if you don't like it.
I wonder what you made Suzu have in store for Momo and co... No seriously, I'm still pretty much clueless. You're the one who has complete control over her now. Heck, even I don't know how you changed her up ; )
But anyways, keep up the good work!

Yo!
You... you used my plot summary as a basis for your prologue... HOW DARE YOU?
Just kidding, of course you can use it! I gave you permission anyways.
I'm not too familiar with Prince of Tennis, so don't expect me to correct OOC-ness.
No typos! YAY!

OOOOHHHHHH! XD I LUV THIS ALREADY! XD ...Can ther be some Royal pair ( Atobe x Ryoma) and/or Sensual pair ( Yukimura x Ryoma) ? XD THANX SO MUCH anD CAN'T WAIT FOR YOUR NEXT UPDATE! XD

I like your story a lot! I think you are off to a very good start! Good luck and happy writing! :)

Plz continue :D Its a good story :)

more please!

I like the idea and the plot :) I've read lots of novels and books about stories like these where the setting is in an alternate universe and/or has a very different and dysfunctional society (i.e. 1984, Handmaid's Tale, The Fade) so I was drawn into the summary. You are also a good writer, but please refrain from putting out "bad summary" or "the summary sucks" or something along those lines, because that would just discourage people from checking out your story, so please delete those lines in your summary. Honestly, your summary is good, so have some confidence and faith in yourself and give yourself some credit. :) Can't wait to read more of your this (provided this won't go into a yaoi/shounen-ai story... Not discriminating but I honestly am just not a fan of those).

All the best! :)