this is amazing! but theyre in 5th year, and sirius wasnt even friends with evans.

I love the way you've written these; each dream starting out as a normal day, then devolving into their worst fear as their weaknesses are exploited. And then the moment at he end of each chapter where they point out that as long as they are together the nightmare will never become reality.

They are all great, but I think James' is my favourite. The other all have fairly obvious fears, but James (being the only one who isn't "fundamentally fucked up") is most afraid of failing his friends. It is a great way of summing up his role in the group.

That was heart wrenching! I thought it was real, and I was so sad, my heart was breaking. And then it was a dream! Well done, well done.

'You aren't fundamentally fucked up.'
That's the best way to put it really. I absolutely adore what you've done with James, especially because this is the first time I've read my own views on the marauders' dynamics summed up so perfectly.
'He needed them as much as they needed him.' was a brilliant way to put it really, especially about how he treated them based on how great they were in his eyes.
A brilliant character analysis, and a brilliant way of bringing it to light.
James' was my favourite by far.

This was absolutely beautiful. I don't review a lot of books, but this one...this one is perfect. :)

that was beatiful! I can feel my heart exploding as i read it! oh wow...

Okay those were some really nice insights into the boy's minds but I think you should have put them in order of school year. Still I really enjoyed reading them. Good job :)

I really liked this story. And I wanted you to know that, but I'm bad with reviews and I'm not sure what else to write...

That was once again, amazing!

Very good how you move from the contented squirrel-watching opening to the first hint of unease – Sirius’s unexplained absence – then puzzlement: where is Peter? And then he appears, and the nightmare develops. Nice touch, having Lucius and Bellatrix there when they should not have been. Reading the dream, I thought that James had somehow managed in his sleep to sidestep into an alternative universe – and maybe he did, the universe in which the Marauders didn’t exist as a group, and he wasn’t their friend and leader. As Sirius explains, James is the foundation on which all the Marauders rely. But perhaps he is wrong in the conclusion he reaches at the end: perhaps James is the one who could have made it on his own, without the others. Happily he didn’t have to find out. A thought-provoking story.

I really really like this story!
It was brilliant! The characterizations of Remus, James, Peter and Sirius were spot on! I'm so glad you wrote this, because it was just amazing!

fantastic!

I really like this chapter, and this story as a whole. I hope you add some more chapters if you have time. I would love to read them :)

Brilliant. You’ve got more of the ‘dream’ feeling in this than in the other two. Peter ‘couldn’t quite remember why his friends weren’t with him’ – yes, that’s how it is in dreams, ‘turning a corner into a similarly dark corridor’. And ‘Malfoy’s polite smile seemed to turn malicious’ – exactly so. You’ve caught the menacing quality of a dream. It’s interesting that you’ve set this dream in first year. Peter has this insight into himself, his weakness and potential for surrendering, right at the start. Now he has nearly 10 years in which to forget all about it, but deep down he never does forget. In his dream he meant well, he never wanted to betray his friends, he just couldn’t see any way out of it. And that’s how I think he was later, when it happened for real. This dream unlike the other two is an omen. But he wakes up, and everything’s all right. For now. And if he had told the others the whole truth about his dream, what then? They might have been okay with it, ‘it’s only a dream’. But it might have planted a tiny seed of doubt that would have sprouted years later when it came to the choosing of a secret-keeper. I like the neat way you worked in the birth of the idea of the Marauders’ Map. There is so much in this story, it wants re-reading several times to appreciate it fully. A great job.

Dawwwwww! this is soo cute!
i love it please keep writing then and maybe do one for lily. that would be nice. thanks