This sounds really interesting! I hope you decide to continue!

This is great

Ok

It's FACTION, not FRACTION. Sorry. You should get a beta, I've heard they really help with all the mistakes. Also, my mom took me and my baby sister to the pet store, and we got a Dress (not my idea, it was my sister's.) for our dog. She started running around like a crazy dog when they put it on her, and one of my little brothers said she was Drag Racing. You get it? 'Cause, you know, she was wearing a dress! LOL!

Amazing! I love it!

Yeeey! Looking forward to next chappie!

YEAH! A new chapter!
I really love the sorry so far! Cannot wait for the next chapter!

Great chapter! Loving it!

Just a heads up though as I noticed this in when you were talking about next chapter, it's Mikaela.

Much better! You've improved. There were a few grammar mistakes, but not that noticeable. We're only amateurs after all?

I liked the bits of history you gave at the beginning, it seems right for your story. :)
For the oddest reason, Echo and Scarlet remind me of Sideswipe and Sunstreaker. Echo's funny, and happy. While Scarlet's more rougher like Sunstreaker. She complains about the simpler things. The two sets of Twins just remind me of eachother.

I wonder what Judy was complaining... no screaming about? Maybe an Autobot destroyed her rose bushes again(this is after Transformers 2007 right?).
Keep up the good work! Your story has potential.

OK! LOVE IT! Keep the chapters coming!

Interesting, interesting, interesting... So they're twins... Living on Earth? Are in the bipedal (bot) forms or are they using holoforms? I was a little confused about that. I look forward to see how this turns out!

Interesting beginning for a first fan-fiction. I'm curious to see where you take this. Will look forward to reading more of it. :)