Its perfect :)

The poem is lovely! It's was wonderfully written! And the story was just soooo heartbreaking and sad! Tears are threatening to fall at the moment! Oh... Too late now, they fell already... Anyways you did a splendid job. Thank you for writing such a beautiful poem and heart moving story!

sad ... three tear dropped from my eye , truly sad ...
the sky which embraces all fell into darkness as his elements betayaed him , the sky was now broken , when the sky is broken , all elements will fall , not one will survive becouse the elements need the sky , and the sky too , need the element , with just one broken ,all will break ...
-mayumi

love it
keep up the great work

Ah, damn. That was beautiful. How can Kyouya blame himself when he was the only one beside Tsuna? -sob- Last day of your holiday you say? Do you live in Malaysia?