If Rasengan is a drill, then why isn't Naruto piercing the heavens?

Very good deductions! And I love the AU, but makes me think would the Uzumaki clan really be wiped out during the war? Uzumaki clan Shadow clan, how have they not taken over the world.

Your story idea is pretty nice. It's original and Hana isn't a character that's used all that much. The only critic I have is that many parts of your story feels emotionless. Your characters have all sorts of emotions but you don't describe them. You sort of get around it by their actions, but you don't say HOW they FEEL and that makes them feel without emotion. Also, the story feels a bit rushed at times. Characters say things, without an introduction -best way I can describe it- and well... I like the story so far, but it could be improved.

Kingdark

This is a really great premise and method, why does it seem to be abandoned? Are you injured or have you switched sites?

loved your story and your analysis of narutos world

Well at least on your profile it says you're looking to update/edit this so I'm going to hold out hope that a fic with a great premise like this gets updated

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Damn, such a good opening act and then you stopped...what a pity. Regardless, awesome first chapter and best wishes if you ever feel like piking it up again!

Nice.

This is really fun!

This is distiller brilliance.

I would love to see more of this, and agreed with almost all of your AN at the end. There was a lot of intelligent thought put into what makes sense and what does not. More people should make that effort.

About your rinnegan ideas; What does that have to do with eyes?

If I could write humor I would try to write fanfic. Humor make it all better. You do so much good. All I can do is angst, if anyone needs angst all they have to do is read a newspaper or history. I hate angst. Go humor. Go you.

Ever since I read the name of the weapons shop I have been continuously and randomly breaking into giggles and snickers thank you.