Ehhhh I've read better ones... This is okay I guess? but since Furuya is my fav character I personally don't really like this, also the pacing just seemed a little odd to me? I don't mean any offense but I just couldn't get into it. *shrug*

NOICE STORY I LOVE IT WHY ARE YOU EVEN BORN INTO THIS CRUEL WORLD?!(not in a bad way) YOU'RE TO WONDERFUL FOR THIS WORLD

I finished your story within 2 days. This is super amazing, thank you for writing such a well thought out plot. The characters felt real and the ending felt realistic. And your action scenes were pretty great too!

Daaamn. Amuro... I hope you wrote this before knowing his story /3

Very interesting story, thank you for writing and sharing it!

I don't know if I have already left a comment here. So... I like this story (and it's french translation to, because I'm french)

I can't believe I'm still survive after reading this _
when the other seems less than 20 chapters, here the very first of the series has 34 chapters, totally give me the best thrill of suspense.
Now I'm glad I finally finish this and up to the next series. Jaa ne

Oh boy, it's so weird reading Amuro as the bad guy now that I know who he is.

Thanks for the awesome story!
I thoroughly enjoyed it and will be reading all the other stories in the series!

Wow, this was a very fast and enjoyable read, thank you for writing this! TBH, I'm not good at giving feedback and I'm not a writer myself, so I just wanted to express how much I loved the story.

You explained that you were not a native English speaker, but that isn't noticeable at all. You truly master the language and tell the story fluidly, in a very engaging way. You're too good at keeping the stakes high (I mourn for Akai-san's death) and filling the plot with intriguing cliff-hangers. IMO, the switch between POVs and time lapses are seamless and enrich the plot.

I think the characters are very well depicted, true to canon. Vermouth's sacrifice is heartbreaking, seeing how this mysterious woman has always been cold-blooded yet so charming. What took me off guard was the boss' identity, it's a great detail and very unpredictable. Another thing I liked is how Gin is still the main enemy, as it ought to be, considering he's the bad guy that started it all. The boss isn't that threatening, as in his first appearance, he just monologues and tells a sob story, and in his second appearance, he takes his own life. It only helps contrast Gin's ruthless personality.

I don't think I can pick a favorite chapter right now, each one is as good as the others!

Just a tip: In some of your sentences, you use "what" instead of the relative pronoun "which". One example is: "Ai got some coffee for herself, *what* Jodie noticed with a raised eyebrow." (chapter 8).

I don't remember if you said you updated your fic here too and not only on AO3, but just in case, Agasa calls Conan "Shinichi", not "Shinichi-kun", he uses "-kun" only with Conan ;) Try out the English wiki for DC, it's good to check such things.

Stay up late until midnight to read this story until the last chapter! man, what a roller coaster, full of cliffhanger. It's unbelievable you're not a native English speaker because your grammar so damn good!
thank you for sharing this excellent story.

Oh my... I really hope I'm not going to have a "Sorry you already submitted a review on this chapter and can't anymore" message, but I'll save mine if it's the case and copy it on another chapter (I'm actually reviewing the last one).
Gosh, your fic! Your fic! So many things to say! You did a lot of work telling what happens after the building events, even if I'd have loved a bit more (Kogoro's excuses to Shinichi for example :3 ), and the end is great!
As for what you've learned, I have the same feeling with characters living on their own. When I write, I don't predict a lot so it can help, especially when I put them in danger, I dont always know how to get them out and they more or less find a way out by themselves in a way x) It's strange but funny.
I didn't find your action scenes to be that bad, but I can understand the feeling. Sometimes I really have a bad time writing something and feel like it's bad, but when I read it again it sounds better than during the writing process (or people say so but I still think it's not that good... Anyway).
Yeah, the ends... I can totally relate to that x)
I really haven't been far in the only fic I began to write in English. I think I'll try out to translate my French ones, should be easier, even if I'd love to continue the English one x)
I'll try to look forward the bonus stage you gave, if I understood right? Anyway, that was really great! I've looked up some new English words too but I doubt I'll remember much of them x) But anyway. I dunno if the mistakes I spotted in the printed version are still there and I don't want to reread everything xD I had really too much of feels already for today P (I was supposed to do stuff... Well, I didn't xD).
So, again, a big thanks for this fic! Globally it's really, really good, even if there's some things I like less (all in my opinion of course, I'm not objective at all). I'll try to get back to its translation soon because even if some French DC fans also speak English, all don't and it's be a shame to miss this fic! 3
(And, well... Yeah, I couldn't post this on the right chapter xD)

... Okay, this end of chapter... I'm like "Oh crap, crap, crap, I knew it would happen"!
By the way, as I thought, I forgot some things in my last review, and will probably forget some more here but well, it doesn't matter except to me I guess x)
So, I noticed the number of chapters seems different between here and my printed version, but anyway.
How come they still didnt' find Akai and Amuro's bodies? Did they got burnt? I find Akai's death a bit disappointing for his character (he's supposed to be a Silver Bullet after all, and would know Gin saw him tail off I think, but anyway).
I really shouldn't read such good fic in only one day, but I couldn't help! I'm probably going to think about it for several days now, it happens pretty often... But gosh this is really one of the best fic I've read so far!
I'm way too lazy to list the elements I like and dislike, and again I'm not sure it has much interest, but I like to talk about some as exemples so...
I don't think Shinichi would really need several days to grow up again. If the antidote allows him to get his body back, there should be a way to prevent this effect to stop (by erasing the poison's traces maybe?) but anyway, the "scientifics facts" are interesting and echoes my biology's studies, even if I don't know much about this part of biology and didn't took the time to look it up, it's still interesting.
Oh yes, and I had a big question : where is Sera?! I don't think she'd have missed all that happened, especially since it got in the news and everything, and she usually looks Conan more or less closely. It's strange we hadn't heard about here. Maybe she'll appear in the next chapters? I hope so!

How to say that? Well, I guess the best and shortest way is : OH MY GODNESS!
Remember me? You gave me file of your fic so I could print it (the result is pretty nice by the way, especially the pictures you made to end the first chapters!). So I finally began to read it seriously (I only went thought the beginning quickly, even if I spoiled myself several things doing so x) and read the like three first chapters as I was translating them into French, yeah, I didn't forget that either, anyway).
How to summarize? Your fic is really great from what I've read so far (right now I've stopped at the end of this chapter I'm reviewing, but I'll probably have finished your fic by the end of the day and let another review). There's some mistakes, some stuff I find odd or OOC (Conan would prefer the "adult medics" in the three first chapters, don't remember where exactly, as there is adult and children medicaments for a reason you can't overpass even if you're a shrunken teen, and he probably know about it, but anyway).
There's a lot of ideas in your fic that I'd loved (but I'm way too lazy to list them all, and I bet it would be pretty boring to read), like the hesitation of Conan to leaving Kogoro's place and the relatives he has as Conan. The boss's identity too. The fact that Vermouth hadn't a bulletproof vest was odd but anyway.
I've skipped your comments on each chapter as I'm reading my printed version, but I really wanted to let you a comment here! So thanks for this fic, it's great work! 3 As said I'll probably let another review when I'm finished, but I wanted to let one now because really it's good and I was afraid to forget some of the stuff I wanted to mention