An the grace of the walk

The way you write is confusing. The original writer made this story amazing, but your style just isn't for me. You repeat yourself way too much, and you say one thing then change it the next. I just can't continue. Sorry.

I do love this story but it feels like you're rushing it. The characters aren't interacting. It's just Bella talking and describing.

this fic turned bad after the adoption, i can understand and forgive the weird writing style and super mushy ooc plot, and even the abysmal grammar but the ending? really? ten years of torture and rape? that’s so beyond disturbing i can’t even tell you, and don’t get me started on the “we were sure they would start to like it” comment. people like you make rape seem less heinous then it actually is, and it makes me sick.

She needs to learn to freakin' listen..especially when it has to do with her safety against other vampires. I swear, if the killer had still been in the house, I wouldn't have even felt bad if they killed her. Jeez, she's so damn stupid.

Loved it.. happy Jules was doing better. Love y'all's writing. Thank you for sharing your words. Meg

Happy Belated or early Birthday... loving the story. Not sure how I missed it before. Meg

I want to destroy Alice...

Thank you for an amazing story.
This story has it all, couldn't stop reading.
Simply addictive

Thanks so very much for sharing your story, I really enjoyed reading it.

So glad to hear that.

So sorry to have heard that and since that was two years ago I'm am hoping everything went well and she is ok.

I didn't like that at all. That was just wrong. It made them all no better than Edward and Alice. I can't even seem to put into words why that was so wrong but it just didn't feel right at all. It also seemed a little unrealistic, even in the vampire world.

I thought they were leaving Forks and going to Texas to change Bella sooner than later. It seems to be almost a month now. I was also was wondering what happened to Seattle? Apartment, job, friends?

How could Alice and Edward not know they are not wanted? Alice must know jig is up and Edward must know everything Esme and Carlisle have found out by now. Shouldn't he be pissed at Alice? Hasn't he seen Jasper and Bella together as mates in their minds? Even if he's in denial and wants to find Bella anyway shouldn't he be pissed at Alice?
Way to go Bella...

Alice was probably hoping Bella would be killed by Victoria but that does leave me wondering why Alice was calling Jasper to get to Bella because she saw her sourounded by blood. Why would Alice send Jasper running to Bella? Did she wait to call thinking he would find her dead? Peter then told Alice that Bella was the major's mate. Wouldn't that confuse Alice since she seemed to already know that she was Jasper's mate? Does Alice know Jasper is the major?
Edward... He is definitely an arrogant obnoxious ass but I'm not really feeling like he should die for that. Alice was very manipulative apparently and also was highly trusted within the family and with her visions she would know just what to do and say to get her way. Alice would have played on Edwards worst fears, it seems she played everyone like a fiddle.