I love this story! Please find the time to finish it Author-nim!

47 mistakes, please revise it. It should look like this
"MALCOLM!" I hear the familiar sound of my house leader opens my door into my dorm. "Wake up!" She yelled at me as the sound of the lever next to my door is flipped and the sound of the redstone to the light placed directly above my bed.

"NNNNG!" I groaned as the light hit my tan face.

"Get ready! You oversleep and your first class is in 10 minutes!"

"What! Shit." I said looking up into the ceiling my long black hair falling to my eyes. "Okay, whatever just get out so I can get ready." I wait as the door shuts behind me and I go into my bathroom. My name is Malcolm Shuttner, I'm an orphan in a small village named Sweet Valley. I heard that it was a nice place once before the Ender Dragon came to power and cursed the land with darkness.

Every morning we wake up and head down to a pavilion for roll call and breakfast I usually miss roll but make it down for the meal. We have a giant stone brick wall with a ledge over one side of the wall(the outer side) so spiders cant climb there way up and over into the little stronghold we've created around the town hall right next to a hotel and a few houses. The orphans live in the hotel cramped in because most of the parent and guardians were sent away to fight the forces of the Ender Dragon. They never returned now we are stuck here to always be trapped by his forces losing more people each day. As we eat there are always people being dragged in with unspeakable wounds from protecting the small stronghold we have worked hard to build, but I reality we all know that it will fall unless we find a hero with a great and uncontainable power of the great Najmi.

Najmi was the first real human in Minecraftia he became friends with the legendary Mob Princesses. Najmi found his way home but not without leaving his seed in Minecraftia witch has fermented and grown in this place hatching the first humans. Or at least that's how we think this race has started.

I finish in the bathroom and head to my small closet and get my I usually wear, blue jeans white t-shirt and a black zip-up hoodie that has a sewn in flag showing our residence to the Ender Dragon, all of these cloths were never to be in this world but Najmi gave us the fabrics and the idea to craft them for his new race in the world.

Finally, in the pavilion, I see the many wolves that we have bowing in front of the statue of the wolf princess Lone. I walk past them Remembering why and how we have wolves on our side. A long-ago Najmi meet Lone and her pack in the winter biome of the world and made his own pack there and gained Nature Magic From Lone's Wolf mark. I crossed the pavilion to the town hall where the classes are held. The boys go to 4 educational classes which include: Mathematics, Mob history, Najmi's travels, and Crafting. We also have a training class at the end of the day because as soon as we make it out of school we are expected to go straight into the military to protect this stronghold. The girls in my class have 5 classes which include the first four classes I have but with an addition, their last class is Family Care which is supposed to be only taught to females because they are unable to fight so they raise the family inside the walls.

I sigh as I take the first few steps up to town hall to go to my first class, Math, Najmi helps me, I think to myself as I enter the building.

I felt like I was reading through the dossier of a bunch of millennials instead of a fanfic, and to think it was INSPIRED by another fanfic and still not have any story to tell...

You'll do much more better in real life collecting info rather than writing a well-narrated story.

Hey, it's been a while, I joined the Air Force so I've been busy but I got the chance to sit back down and look at the story. I like that some people actually care a little bit. If you want me too I'll try to find the time to finish it. Let me know by a PM.

This was really good anybody have any idea what happened, im guessing life well if your getting this, update man this is awesome

What happened this story was sooooooooooooooo good keep updating or write a actual book ;)

Si vis pacem para bellum, latin for "if you want peace prepre for war" i smiled when i saw that

To be onist Lone is my favorite mob princess

Race: Human
Age: 17
Apperance: dark blue eyes, dark black hair.
Height: 6, 3
Clothes: White robe, red sash, iron gauntlets.
Personality: Kind, funny, and shy too new people.
Likes: Potatoes, Inventing, drawing, reading
Dislikes: No one :D
K thatsg al gtg my older bro is after me for stealing his falout 4 XD

Man that was a great chapter keep that up I loved it but to bad about the sword

I would like to make an oc but i forgot the template

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Race:human/ender/creeper(not really creeper or ender just has their blood in him. Both royal blood(like blood transfusion)do have their powers)

Age: 14(immortal but loves this age)

Appearance:ordinary guy with smarts, no special muscular appearance, but is super strong. can summon fire sword and ice sword(Fire is clarent and ice is Excalibur) along with ice bow with fire arrows(infinite) both sword are unbreakable and are katana

Height:5 ft 7.5 in

Clothes:usually wears creeper hoodie or ender hoodie with green or black pants(greencreeper Blackender)
Has ring for anti-wither(gives protection against all negative effects like the wither effect) and 2 necklaces in shape of fire and ice

Personality:easy to piss off,nice when not mad,hates to be bossed around,

Likes:Fire,ice,creepers,blaze,endermen,mining,potions,nukes,lightning,electricity,more nukes, gunpowder, teleportation, the end, the nether,
Dislikes:cats,Apple,did I mention nukes?

Bio:
name is mizuki harvey(yes that is japanese name) his brother, sister, and parents were killed by his uncontrolled powers.(he didn't care that much for them anyways)now he can control it perfectly and more. He was there when najme existed in the area as a watcher(never talks to others and hides) he wants to get rid of the curse of the ender dragon without killing It(due to his ender blood) he can blow up like a creeper without actually dying, teleport, and use witchery Magic at necklaces contains his other 2 SOULS and when dropped on ground summons girl(firefire girl controls fire and ieice girl controls ice)names are fireignis and iceglacier(not really creative but what the heck)he always keeps 64 nukes and 64 levers with him in a infinite storage backpack for emergencies

thepurplecraft lol i try dude

It means If you want peace prepare for war and and u made my OC more badass then i thought possible :D