I really enjoyed what you created...I wish you would've been able to finish

Good stuff... but careful...ur coming close to 'comical' or 'fluff' with this chapter . It losing it's 'serious' 'adult' edge.
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I like that the wolves smell in chapter 1, and STILL smell in chapter 10. I am glad you didn't do what SM did, and give that an 'honorable' mention, then slam the two groups together / forcing a union, like they didn't have problems with each other personally or physically.

I like that you didn't allow them all up in the house once it became an issue. Because that was stupid! Gawd so many things were just overlooked and twisted by SM because she wanted to give Bella E-V-E-R-Y-T-H-I-N-G! This super over the top Happily Ever After! And nobody called her on any of it.

SMGDH.

Fricking lemmings... all walking off the side of the mountain, one after the next. SMGDH.

But not u... nope not you my friend. You seem to be taking it it all into account. Much respect!

TRILL

Nice nice nice... love the 'real' emotions. SM skipped over all of this because she had a war to get to and she need Bella sane. So a few quick words and everyone was made to forget that Bella was supposed to be 'struggling' with this change!

Love the fact that you kept the fight 'realistic' and Bella didn't all of a sudden toss them about just because she was a newborn.

I mean if she did that, then Victoria's newborns could have done much worse.

Thanks for keeping it 'real' LOL.
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Jasper... man... not his fault i guess... to much anger floating about but still... he went too far. Hmmm with Bella this mad... I dont think Irina will survive their encounter. LOL. Draaammmaaa
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Good lord... why the hell did they leave the child with JB? God I hate this idea of JB and renesmee. IT was crap when Sm wrote it and better crap that everyone sticks to it. I never finished the book because of that. It was soooo stupid. I had to watch the movie (bootleg, no way Im paying, and giving SM more money for crap) to see the end. And guess what.. .it was just as stupid as I imagined it would be. This dude... aro. was struggling to find a reason to make them look guilty, when CHARLIE was the obvious one! I mean... what the hell was it with this "NEED TO KNOW" nonsense. Especially when he has been given 90% of the puzzle already! Come on, how dense could he possibly be to know figure out the last piece of the puzzle. "If jake is a werewolve i guess my daughter is a...hmmmm... a mermaid?" SMGDH. #idiot

That should have been the thing the Cullens did that screwed them over. but nope that was overlooked like ever other 'reasonable' excuse. SMGDH. And nobody complain because nobody was paying attention. Just going with the flow.

So again, THANK YOU for keeping things... LOGICAL.
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Why dont they let her use her own venom? Wouldn't that be better than Edward adding his?
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Why does it take that long to heal in your version?

Plz tell me u didn't abandon this story XD its amazing!

Wow! Lots going on in this chapter!

I can see all the tensions and emotions she is experiencing.

And now for the Jacob/Charlie scene...

Loved it and can't wait for the next chapter!(:

Good chapter she should bite him

Awesome!

This story is interesting, and different. I like it, and I hope that Bella will soon start to return to herself, she is kind of on a loop. Though I understand that this is how the newborns behave, it does tend to get a bit redundant, and there is no moving forward. I can't wait for the next update.

Great chapter also I hate the imprint

Loved it and can't wait for the next chapter!:)

Loved it and can't wait for the next chapter!:)

Nice

Nice twist with the blood. Update soon please:-)