This was a great story. I loved how you wrote the characters and I enjoyed reading it.

THIS... is how stuff should've went down in that episode. I liked this MUCH better.

Your story is excellent but remember there is no people, or man, or woman. Only ponies, stallions, and mares

Ah... sniff im crying... you you actually made me cry! 8o

I'm enthralled by this. I greatly enjoy it. keep up the good work

i like the way the story is being composed