Trying to be funny with the story and giving the story out at a pace no one will be able to follow.. Genius.. If you want people to avoid your profile.. Which is the more likely situation considering people do that to find a story with actual potential. But seriously your story went at a pace too fast for anyone to like. That and you may need a new profile in order to have readers.. Reasons? As I said the reasons before why people avoid specific profiles this profile in their minds more likely believe you make terrible stories judging from this.. With its obvious mistakes.. Given the negatives and positives I can give a 3/10 nothing higher as there's no other positive to look at. Just read the ENTIRE story yourself and think.. Do i want to read stories like this all the time? With out thinking our answer is a big fat NO. So in a sense you need a new profile people will avoid this like a plague.. Not that they won't avoid your next profile given how your story went.. So I'm gonna be a average everyday reader and do the same unfortunately.. So this was my review and Gbye.

Well this is interesting and a new twist, I do hope you continue?

Oooh I hope Naruto gets the rinnagen and/or sharingan(ems) :D

good story you have here bro keep going

wtf is up with kiba talking had some trouble reading it...didn't know he was a surfer or whatever

the grammer mistakes were still there, missing words that would have made the sentence flow nicer in a # of spots

Yay update !

kontol

interesting concept...but is his paths going to mirror pains or are they going to differ to a point

if i read correctly and remember from cannon you already answered that question. pain could use all the ninja tech 1 for each body, your story appears to have naruto get 5 different bloodline limits not ninja tech

story had nice leangh and except for possibaly 1-2 spelling/grammer mistakes it was fine and had a nice amt of detail

Please continue! I really like this story!

wow

Interesting update soon