Mori win!? Plot twist. Nani!?

I've read this story twice now and seriously, it got me bawling both times. Your writing needs work: editing, proofreading, spelling, etc. But damn you can write a good, comprehensive story. You know how to play up emotions and you have a deep understanding of character.

HOLY SHIT WHAAAAAAT!?MORI, HARUHI ,TRACKING DEVICE !?DAMN SHIT GONNA HAPPEN NOW

This is the first fanfic I've ever read that has actually brought me to tears. I may have noticed the spelling and grammar mistakes but they could be so easily ignored because your story and writing style had me gripped from beginning to end.

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Sorry, however this story is not really to my taste. Too violent and OC for me. All characters have nothing in common with the original except names.

MORI SENPAI

Intense reading I absolutely loved it. I applauded you for such good story, I have to admit the last few chapters had me tested up so good job on that. I give this a 9.5/10 score for such an interesting plot. I would have taken a little bit on few parts but whatever it was still so good.

Mori

alright this haruhi is amazing much better then the original

I love this, I really, really, really love this!

If you make a another story with haruhi and Harley please let her in up with Harley

I'm really liking how Haruhi is completely different but still has a 'Haruhi-like' feel to her. It's excellent writing!XD

Mori

I am the doctor, and this... is my spoon!