Okay...just no. This story is moving on too fast. Well, no that’s a lie. The actions, the way Madara acts..He loves children in canon for one. Two, he hated his father and would never try and be like him. He would be softer and more understanding. He would not manipulate his 5 year old daughter. He also would never marry unless for love. Also, if his brother survived he would be less of a hardass as well. He was against the “too small coffins” in the first place, and would understand the stress all these actions in your story would effect his daughter horribly. Madara would be overprotective and would love his daughter. This...is hardly how Madara would have acted if he had a daughter. Maybe there would be some similarities between canon and this Madara..but no.

Its weird, but with her lack of progess I suppose she would only be good for breeding.

This was so good though.. I really wish you hadn't discontinued :(

Wow I would never have even considering pairing her with Tobirama, but it actually sounds really intriguing. You could totally make it work

Danzo would also be another interesting idea simply because it would be cool to see how he would develop differently and impact future Konoha

Kasai and Kagami are the cutest but I feel like it would be better off if they did not get together simply because almost everyone expects them to. Plus I really want Shisui to exist lol

Kawarama is adorable but its just weird since he seems too young and immature for someone who would always be 16 years mentally older than him...

Hey there. I just wanted to say that I love this fic. I'm looking forward to how Kasai grows. I hope you update soon. :)))

That was beautiful.
I haven't cried or felt genuine distress for a character in a long time,
Congratulations, your characterisation was superb.

looking forward to more.

It's sad you ended up not wanting to continue this... I really liked it.
Firstly, I never read a daughter or son of malaria fic and I found it interesting. Secondly, I think the confusion of kasai's personality makes her more real, more interesting and has more potential for growth. As you said, 16 year olds aren't terribly resolved personality wise and I think that made it more ok that she wanted to be a child becaus I'm 18 now and sometimes I still want a fucking hug for no reason and it's kinda awkward. I really enjoyed this, I'll go visit the rewrite but I already saw its abandoned too right?
It's sad life was a harsh but the only thing you can do is move on, I think I'm finally getting that, think about it

Omg! Soooooo gooooooooood! Beating up Tora! Hahahhaahahahah!
Him! HIM! I want to know who's him! So much suspense!

Manipulation...yeesh. Manipulating is an very interesting thingie you know?
Just saying I don't think Kasai should be with Tobirama, because the age gap is just too weird. And the fact that he's the brother of her uncle, which make Tobirama technically her uncle, and uncle-niece shipping is just too weird.
But, as long as you make it work out...

...she's batman!

Kagami is so sweet...
My god, she's going crazy! My god, every chapter is so interesting! Love it!

Omg! A plot twist that he lied! My god! I really thought that she was gonna run away!
And Madara..Madara was actually protective! Om my gawd, the feels! THE FEELS!
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaauuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuugh!

Oh yeah, just saying that it'd be cute that instead of giving Tora money for the dango he dropped, she made her own dango for him, with extras as interest. Even though Tora is such a bully, it'd be cute!

My god this is so interesting! I can't even describe it! I love conflict with the mysterious chakra-ness... if you understand what I'm saying :P

Oh my gosh! It's so good! She loves her sister so much! And so brave!