The writing quality is good in terms of your spelling and grammar, but the following part of the Content Guidelines is broken for being a second person or you-based story:

Entries not allowed:
5. Any form of interactive entry: choose your adventure, second person/you based, Q&As, and etc.

Please remove all of the elements related to the reader like "(e/c)" and replace them all with any canon character or original character. Switch to the first person or third person point of view. You can always put it on another site where it is allowed like Archive Of Our Own.

I think you should write it agin but tow down the chapter with mat tayra. In it as I think that character is too happer on its self . But keep the the chapter that is called kissing winter itself as I like the way you wrote it. When you can, please and thank you, and the other chapters you can keep then the shame as well, if you went to that is.

This was good. Can't wait for the better update, though.
Please do a pond and not a lake! Jack drowned/was revived in a pond, not a lake-don't know why people always get that wrong. :/
I don't like Mattaya at all. Very annoying.
Sorry if I sounded harsh!

I liked the Snowdrop Reference. Thank you.

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwww! Poor Jack!
"I know you're a waffle,"
"Gah,"
I've read this fict so many times. Keep up the gr88888 work!

PITCH IS MY UNCLE!?

Omygawd so cute but unthawing it would actually be freezing it, since thawing is melting (no offense or anything)!:)

I JUST MELTED! LITERALLY!

Now I wanna kiss Jack. *pouts*

Dear god, myttya is hillarious! I just dyed entente laughing!
(The reason it was internal is because I am in a room full if pepole) that was hillarious! You shur she's not mentally insane?
-girl with strange ideas

Lol

Hello! I can see that you haven't updated in a VERY long time (you PROMISED! *pouts*). You want to know what bothers me the most? An AMAZING story going unfinished, that's what. And that's exactly what this is, an incredible piece of literature that has been neglected. It makes me sad. It should do the same to you. Please continue this story. It would make me (and many others) very happy, I'm sure. Thank you for understanding. I absolutely LOVE the crazy girl. She sounds like a cross between me and my best friend, which, FYI, is a VERY dangerous combination indeed! Just so you know, I shall be waiting (not so patiently) for the next chapter and many more to come, I hope!
Peace, Love, Reading Rocks
GreyEyedGirl out
PEACE PEOPLES!

Oh my gosh... she's crazier than me.

Mattaya is a freaking lunatic. I like her. I couldn't stop laughing through the whole chapter. OHMERGERD u should continue
X3

Uppddaaatteee pleaassseee
The last chapter update was 16th March 2013
A year ago
So pleeaaassseeee?

Oh btw just re-read the whole fic, and its still freaking7ng amazing

i love it continue writing please