| Reviews for Let me hold your hand |
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Kuro-Otaku292 chapter 1 . 5/7/2013 Kkkkyyyyyaaaaaaaaaw is do cute But kinda wrong cause their step bros |
Aservis Roturier chapter 1 . 3/25/2013 this was very nice, I would,however, recommend you slip the step-brother information into one f the first sentences. Let's see...how about: ""Sebastian! Sebastian!" My step-brother waved his arms the moment he saw me." or if you wanted to keep it a surprise put it here: "Wah! Wh-what are you doing?" I lifted him in a hug… "Sebas-mph?" And finally kissed my step-brother where I really wanted to kiss him the most: on the lips. Remember when real authors write books they don't need tags like "By the way..." They utthe information in the rags or in the exposition. Good story. Well done. |
promocat chapter 1 . 3/16/2013 love "brother"/" brother" ciel sebastian love! |
Tanya chapter 1 . 3/15/2013 Neat story! |