may say the story needs a little improvement because there's some things that are a little vague, holes that need to be clarified. But it's not bad, the problem of discerning between what's right and what's not it's always something that means a great debate and most of the time you can never get a satisfactory answer. Something that needs attention, I think, is that Draco needs to show his leadership qualities or explain why he is chosen because, as readers of the original story, we may think that he doesn't fit in the role at all. Something that I like is the dilemma lying in Hermione, she needs to have an open mind, not being prejudiced, after all, she is stuck in that side of the world and she must find a way to deal with it without dying in the process. Narcissa could be a character that promises a lot of material for the plot, if you want that. I think os a good effort.
Well, I hope you would continue someday, this story have potential.

Woah twist ending to this chapter I love the plot please write the next chapter soon

PLEASE UPDATE! I'M A HUGE DRAMIONE FAN AND NOME OF MY FRIENDS ARE! PLEASE PLEASE PRETTY PLAESE!

Please update 3
I love this story :)

Oh, God, please update soon. Seriously, I'm going to DIE if you don't.

oh please update again! im kinda startin to fall in love with this story lol oh god im such a nerd for saying that but its tru

Oooh! I love the the title and summary of this story! I hope you update soon, the plot seems really interesting!

love it, update soon!

Oh my god! I REALLY hope you update! This story is soooooooooooooooo amazing!

Awww! Poor Hermione! I can tell Draco likes her though... this story is amazing and I hope you update soon!

Oh my god. I like this story. I REALLY hope you update the fourth chapter... this is bloody amazing! :)

This story is so awesome! Please update soon!

I can't wait for the next update.

awsome

Loved this chapter.