this story sound really interesting.

there is no excuse to neglect one child over the other especially in kushinas and minatos case seeing as to how they can actually create clones

While this would have been a good FanFiction it’s not because of how short it is and that it was never finished. The beginning of the story is how it would be for a multi book series which unfortunately it’s not so the first couple chapters are useless and not needed but it had potential to be something amazing.

Hello. I am an aspiring writer such as yourself was once to be. Or are presently. What you said on the beginning, it is true that authors are being unappreciated in their time today. Well, being one of them, I feel very relatable.

Anyway, I liked that you expressed yourself here. That authors are to be appreciated, even if they are just fanfiction writers. Thanks for that.

Continue its definetly good

I will say that how he is so willing to kill other children but not his own to end a threat is such hypocrisy. Also.. Well, when you look at most other situations in Naruto whenever a Kage does as he does they end up either dead or their village declines one way or another.

I mean the killing of the woman in the previous chapter. Yes.. That will get people to have faith in you, to follow you out of respect and live up to the whole Will of Fire with Konoha being a family... Sure... *sighs sadly*

I think it is why the author stopped updating this story. It was so cliche filled and so easy to point out truly massive problems that they gave up. Shame as this did have potential if it was planned ahead.

Hopefully they take the time to rework the entire story some day.

Why are you using the over blown "We need to train only one child" cliche? Why not have one of the Thousands of ninja train Naruto when they can't and vice versa for Natsumi?

You have all these intelligent people but authors.. Authors make them purposely stupid and blind to force a story along a certain path. It removes immersion when you can spot a dozen things that could have been done differently in a few Seconds, and yet these people are supposed to be geniuses at times.

*Sighs sadly* Another neglected if not abused Naruto story eh? Honestly these things.. Hopefully he just becomes a missing nin via killing people. Most don't have that they simply have him either leaving or being removed from service.

Would be nice if he was Actually a genuine, terrifying S rank missing nin.

Another why could be this "Why does the word 'The' start 90% of your paragraphs and sentences?" Ohhhh burn!

oh god don't tell me naruto is going to get neglected that would be so sad

Please continue. I LOVE YOUR STORY SO MUCH.

40 k words you might think that's it's worth reading but rly so for 4 ch nothing happened and plot don't even start. If you reading this review I would on you place find some other fiction.

Interesting cult

Odd are you sure civilians is the right tile?
He revealed quite a lot of information maybe instead it is support staff is the correct word when you have non combat personal vital to a military dictatorship .2 since you recruit soldiers put of them they also are are a reserve force.

3 here the fun thing about this world child soldiers you can easily fill the losses with fodder for a while actually thanks to time dilation techniques you can get the kids ready for what ever job you need in a couple of months since root does not do it it damages and burns them out over this time but you can get the numbers you need

Interesting
It makes absolutely no sense for a village that has never faced such an opponent before to have a 'here is a jutsu that can beat a Bijuu' box lying around."
Actually remember rin ever since then they should be preparing for one