A great story. Very well written.

Narsil,

This is very very nicely done! From "... Perhaps the way he starts when I speak to him, .." all the way to "... Does it come back to me eventually? Is it my fault in the end? Why has he always feared me so? I sigh and draw a hand across my face. ..."

It is an astute slice of Denethor's agonized pshyche. And it tells really, the conflict of the old coot's bias and suppressed paternal affections that shapes the dilemma of his relationship with Faramir.

Great effort there.

~W

Ugh, I hate how they botched that up in the movie. My favorite part of all three books, and they managed to screw it up!

Anyway, I just want to say again how much I love your writing style :-D You get into the mood very well.

My favorite sentence:

"We will burn... as all else will burn... as he already burns..."

Kudos!

~tato /_\\

That's almost perfect. I agree that you aren't likely to be pale if you have a fever, but that's hardly worth mentioning when the rest is so good.

Wow. Very, very nice. I really liked it, you did a great job!
-FPP

Good work. You manage to capture the different conflicting emotions within Denethor's tragic character: his pride, his regrets; (limited)insight into his mistakes concerning his family, yet failure to see their needs and accept them for what they are; his efforts to get closer to Faramir, yet his lack of sympathy for his younger son's character traits. Sounds all very convincing. Especially the ending is powerful, his wish to finally be together with his son against all odds and inspite of the former problems. Beautifully done. :-)

Wow! Excellent! Such a nice writing voice, love your style and your narration of Denethor. So good, so dark and so them. Very talented and I look foward to checking through the rest of your work. :) Nice!

Dark, but beautiful. A fitting tribute to the Steward.

Oooh, this is really good...It's not how I pictured Faramir as a youngster, but it's still really great. I love it. Great job.

This fic is amazing, and quite touching. I used to really dislike Denethor (I only had pity for him because he lost the son he loved so much), but you have made his thoughts so real (and written in an excellent Tolkien-style), that I find that you are convicing me otherwise. He really could be pityable (sp?) for so many other reasons.

I really liked "Perhaps the first and last thing we will do together." Very touching line.

Excellent job!

~Revia

P.s. thanks for reviewing my fic! _

Oh wow. Wow. This was amazing. I loved it so much. You write angst very well. You should write more angsty stories. This was really, really good. I'd love to see something about Faramir. You know, maybe angst about being liked less by his father or his father burning himself. I loved this so much. It had wonderful wording, too.

Oh WOW. It's just amazing how you're able to portray Denethor's thoughts like that. I think, perhaps, you do have a little of your thoughts in this piece, but you also kept Denethor's personality in it. It's great!

oh, that was beautiful... I really don't know what to say. Most of the time I avoid the "what was so-and-so thinking at this moment" because they don't come out so well. But that was an insightful way to put it.

Great Denethor pov! This is really well done. His thoughts flow freely and naturally even though he is in such a confused and conflicted state of mind and you manage to generate a great deal of sympathy for him in his despair. I thought it very poignant that you started with a flashback to a time when Denethor managed to make some sort of connection with Faramir and that even that was so unsatisfactory. A realistic vicious circle – Denethor making an effort but only getting more frustrated and angry when he only seems to be able to intimidate his son further. Very terrible that only when he has lost everything that has consumed him can he see what should have been really important - but that it is all too late. I liked the title, by the way. Thanks for a good read.

This was great. I pity Denethor, for he is a man that one should pity. Great job in portraying Denethor.