I just threw my phone. I binged this story over two days and you end it like that?! Utterly heartbroken.
What a great story though.

This should have wayyyyyyyyy more reviews! What an action packed story! Yet the character development and emotional arcs are just as strong. Really amazing.

Hi! I know this story is long finished and you may not even open this account anymore, but I figured I'd throw my two cents in. I really love this story it's great so far from what I've read, but there are a few details from the series you over looked.
Gohan, even as mystic/ultimate can still be a super saiyan, all mystic did was maximize his base potential he can never get stronger in his base form (although with the super saiyan god thing we have now he might) and being a super saiyan will multiply his strength as it would before making him extremely powerful. At the end of Z he is the strongest non-fused fighter eclipsing even SSJ3 goku and Kid Buu, he lost to super Buu due to being distracted and absorbed.
For all mind control the Sacred Water on the lookout can cure it, it is used several times throughout the series for this very purpose, and they would use that at first chance,.
Now that my nitpicking is done I shall get back to this story.

Great story! But dang, I didn't expect it to end like that! Man, I really wish it was happy. I can tell the sequel is a roller coaster, and i'll read it, even it it is going to be deleted and re written sometime. Anyway, great story! Hope it eventually all end well with them.

You need to learn to use proper spacing. You have this whole chapter listed in five paragraphs.

Then hurry up and continue it

Just wanted to add to my Favorites good story.

dude great job! awesome story and sequel sounds great ... what i really liked was Gokhan he was awesome especially since i always wondered what the name would be for a warrior created by combining goku and gohan and you got a perfect one Awesome Job!

i do like this story and all, but vegeta was only seven or eight years old when his planet blew up, it was on the same day that goku was born. thus vegeta couldn't have met dalron during that purge mission, not unless he was very, very young

I liked it very much, great work so far, however Vegetto was created by the porta earings and the fusion is supposed to be permanent. they only defused as an unexpected side affect of being absorbed by Buu. Gojita is the one created by the fusion dance, and he only appears in one movie and DBGT

hey great story. I only have one correction to offer. The fusion you used for Goku and Vegeta (Vegetto) is a fusion with potaro earings and its permanent. The fusion dance however isn't so it shouldn't have been vegetto but instead Gogeta. Besides that minor mistake everything else is awsome. O and please describe Leviathan physically.

It was a good story and all, but I HATED THE ENDING! sorry...nice story...

This has got to be the best dbz story ive ever read. That ive ever come across. I hope u will continue with your sequel.

WHOA! Incredible ending. Dalron was one awesome villain. But Gohan has lost his memory? Poor guy! Poor Videl as well!

dude! thats not fair! Where is teh squeal? this story is really good! i wnana se what happens