Ugh, so well written apart from the fact that the character's have retained their personalities in this perfectly. I love how you wrote the "unwrapping a present" part!

thanks ;)

Seriously good. So well written, and the erotic elements and character reflection flowed together so well

I love how you mixed a love story complete with all the good layers of infatuation and desire with a lemon.

I loved it! It was sweet, and erotic at the same time.

I have read this numerous times and each time I am amazed. Your writing is incredible. You get FourTris better than anyone. This story has the best smut ever. I sure miss your writing.

More!

That was wonderful but it could use some help for Instance
You could add in a kid
Or you might have a second chapter

Pretty good keep it up

OMG... Wowza! Loved it!

i don't know if i've commented before but whatever. anyway i've read this like a million times and honestly, this is the most accurate representation of their relationship i've read yet. wow. amazing job!

Wow! I have to say that your writing is truly amazing. I like the way you word your sentences and keep your characters in character, since that's usually something you don't find in many fanfics. I'm a writer as well, and though I don't publish my stories I understand how those things can be a little hard sometimes. I really like your work, and I hope you keep writing stories!

ahhhhhhhhhh i love this !

Nice!,!he ️Ed her gooooood.I WANT to have it with him!

I feel as if this would fit into the books, well done