| Reviews for The Eerste |
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   mounds01 chapter 8 . 1/13/2015 Different but I like it. I think it is funny and also hot. |
| Edward's spouse chapter 8 . 2/2/2014 excellent story. i hope you decide to continue with it at some point. |
| tululah chapter 8 . 9/7/2013 The plot line is interesting but needs to be developed. |
| tululah chapter 6 . 9/7/2013 Rosalie's outburst is confusing. What is her motive. And who is speaking at the end. |
| Guest chapter 8 . 5/27/2013 Whatever. She should suck another man's dick. It would be only fair. |
| happy.ala chapter 8 . 3/18/2013 Nice, but short :-( |
| happy.ala chapter 6 . 3/18/2013 Awesome |
| happy.ala chapter 5 . 3/18/2013 Ah, ALice, always accurate :-) |
| happy.ala chapter 4 . 3/18/2013 HOT! |
| happy.ala chapter 3 . 3/18/2013 Oooookay ;-) |
| happy.ala chapter 2 . 3/18/2013 Haha, brilliant :-) |
| happy.ala chapter 1 . 3/18/2013 Interesting :-) |
| Nehnah14 chapter 4 . 3/12/2013 ...And now you have the entire chapter in dialogue! "..." should only be used in speech and not narration! |
| Nehnah14 chapter 2 . 3/12/2013 You may want to read back over your chapters...The last paragraph makes no sense! There's no dialogue, yet it seems that a conversation is happening! The below sentance is also confusing, please could you help me to understand what you were saying here? 'The Eerste have more than more circulatory system as well as two hearts.' What do you mean by 'have more than more circulatory system'? forgot to login, by the above name is my pen-name. Sorry! |
| Guest chapter 4 . 3/10/2013 This story is not supposed to be funny right?! But it is and entertaining and light...lol |
