I am glad you took time to rewrite this and clear up a few areas (the trip to Ionia for instance), but I rather preferred the epilogue of the previous version. A personal preference perhaps.

One if the best and most well crafted stories I've read hands down

Truly a fantastic fanfiction to 't wait for more

I have read the previous version of this story..and this is nothing less than amazing. Well the plot is still the same but the grammar and english certainly improved. This is extraordinary... but I'm quite lazy to review so yeah.. Good work!

Till next time, FreakinAssasin.

It's difficult to write a compelling story in first person because of the need for a strong and unique voice, but you definitely pull it off. The narrator has a unique and quirky voice that manages to keep me interested. Your style of writing is very different from mine - almost the exact opposite - but I still enjoyed reading it.

One part did throw me off though. Writing "Demacia is your daddy" just seems a little odd, and pulled me out of the story. It resembles a very modern slang phrase that just seems out of place here.

Really? One review? This deserves more. Either people are busy or this board is filled with stupid kids looking for pairings and crack fics that cannot appreciate a writer that uses big words...

First of all, you have my attention. Most OCs are complete crap and just a way for the writer to feed their own ego. This character you've made seems very interesting. In fact, everything is interesting. You know just what to say to grab a reader's attention and sustain it and I like that.

Secondly, my God do you have a way with the English language! Your writing is so professional and lovely. I find myself carried away by the image you paint with just the simple use of adjectives! Your style is just so graceful and beautiful, much like Sona; and it's not hard for you to make me as a reader feel exactly as you're character is feeling. I pray you keep writing as it is a rarity to find a writer with such flowery and elegant command of writing.

Your plot is intriguing, but I shall refrain from mentioning it for now until I can get more meat to tear into. But as I stated above- you have my attention. I look forward to what you do from here.

This is excellent