Just brilliant!

Hell fuckin yes Irene Adler

I value the fact that you are writing this realistically. I'm black and I would have done the same. There is no way to sugar code this Era. It's American history even if it isn't our proudest moment. Also, love the story so far XD

Please dont let us die waiting at this cliffhanger! I really liked your story, please come back and continue!

I need more! I've really grown to enjoy this story and here you've left us hanging! Please return and update soon!

Update soon please I must know what happens next

Great chapter! You have the characters dialogue style down really well! It makes sense that Jack's speaking manner would change, plus it makes the character seem more real. Can't wait to read more!

Oh dear! Jack cant die! I cant wait for the next update to see what happens

All I have to say is UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!
They r so different but so alike and it's enjoyable to watch their personalitys together

I love the conflict between Shultz and Jack. It makes their chemistry so much more enticing.

Also: totally forgot I wasn't signed in when I left you that ranting review lololol.

If you'd like me to explain anything, as I said, you can contact me on my aim (which I failed to leave): amothedino, or my e-mail .

Hello! I quite like this story. Your dialogue is surprisingly witty and true to character. Hopefully you won't mind if I leave a few bits of critique?

- Not so much recently, but sometimes the content of your Schultz' dialogue seems a little ... casual? In-movie, he speaks with very precise articulation and completely formulated sentences. He doesn't often use contractions, especially when he's making a point. And his language is very, very colorful. You've done excellent on this for the most part, but I think maybe it would help to keep in mind that he doesn't talk in a way that's similar to anybody else; the structure of his sentences are often lyrical, almost. If you could infuse that more into your writing, I feel like your Schultz would jump out more than he already does!

- You mustn't forget: at the heart of Schultz' character, he is ultimately a man who seeks revenge. I don't know if you've touched on this at later parts of your story, but Tarantino has speculated that a backstory which was never added to the movie involved King entering into the bounty hunter business because he's looking for a man who killed someone in his life. And, remember, King brings about his own downfall at the end of the movie by avenging D'artagnon's death by dogs, and he decides to avenge it by shooting Candie. In doing this, we assume he fully recognizes that he is putting Django and Hildie at risk... but he does it anyways. The point is: he is a gentleman, certainly, and he has strong morals (though they're slightly skewered), but at the end of the day, this is still a veneer over a man who believes in death as a penalty. He should be more of a badass! This is a man who can kill an entire gang and then turn around and help his friend build a Snowman! He shouldn't be leaving all of the vigilante-ness to Jack!

- Sometimes Jack's dialogue switches between hard-rocking Southern gal, to well-bred, well-articulated lady. I'm not sure if this is on purpose, but maybe a hybrid of the two is more what you're looking for?

- I don't want it to seem like I'm picking apart your dialogue, because it's actually one of the things I love the most about this fic, but some of the phrases you use - while pretty - aren't exactly how period-accurate people would be speaking. I don't have any examples because the chapter I'm writing this on is super well done, LOL, but I did notice this in earlier chapters. Maybe you should read some excerpts or watch a movie that's less of a spaghetti western that Django is (like True Grit) and that might put you more in a mindframe of writing speech that's less modern-esque.

- Don't second-guess yourself! Sometimes in your author's comments, you'll summarize the chapter or make apologies, which is totally unnecessary because we've read the chapter ourselves, and you write them so nicely that we don't need anything more than the raw writing . Don't feel the need to elaborate in a comment unless it's something you shouldn't take credit on (like translating the Spanish on the internet).

I hope this is ok! I'm really, really enjoying the story. You have so much potential, oh man. If any of my critique doesn't make sense, or you'd like me to give you examples or whatever, just ask for my AIM and I'll send it to you asap. You might not, but I know that I personally love to follow up on things like writing critique, so I figured I'd give you the option! Thank you for writing this, and good luck. 3

Great chapter as always! I love how you portray king. I always look forward to reading this story and I check it daily for updates lol. can't wait to find out what happens next. Keep up the good work!

Good chapter! Update soon :)

So I have fallen really far behind with this story, because of life. :(
But I am here to catch up on a few chapters! :)
Jack seems really frightened about what is in Mississippi...
And Schultz won't let her hang! Ahhhhh! I love that! But I wonder what she is so afraid of if it's not being caught. I have a feeling that she has a few demons hiding in that state. Maybe something to do with our mystery man? She seems really stressed about it.
And I think Boyd is pretty ruthless. I wonder if Tommy will be a hindrance to his plans. Hmmm...

Just discovered this story today, and I'm absolutely in love with it! Very intense, and I can't wait to see how king and jacks relationship unfolds. Keep up the good work!