You have an interesting start to your story. Too bad you never finished it.

Aw, I'm so sorry to see this story stopped here! It's such a terrific tale and so very well written (despite the small spelling and grammar errors that a good Beta, proofreader, or helpful reader would be more than grateful to help with, in aide to an incredibly talented AUTHOR, such as yourself!); it puts me in mind of the style of Jane Austin, with it's intelligent dialogue and beautifully flowing scenes: I'm quite in awe of your logical outline and artistic 'eye'!
I do hope that you are well and that you'll consider returning to this story, at some point in your life. Above all, I implore you to keep writing: The gods know we need people, with your gift, to help bring back the art of prose from the depths whence the 'hacks', such as JKR, have drug it!
Thank you, so much for sharing your talents with us!
MelJ
IMHO, Lockhart was a 'Mary Sue'!

I like the idea, but i find it unrealistic that someone from the wizarding world wouldnt take children away from a clearly abusive environment. In fact, if they were regular children and the social worker was a regulat social worker, it is part of the social workers job to keep the children under their care safe

A very nice pre-hogwarts fic, hope to see new updates soon - Heksie

Wonderful story :) Pretty please update?

Smashing good story. Wonderfully intricate and detailed. I hope one day that you will continue it for I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.

This is really good please update soon

Great story. Not sure if Mrs Weasley would be outwardly hostile, unless we hear more backstory on Helen's family which would be interesting I'm sure. Hopefully Helen will work around Ron's feelings of inadequacy. Also looking forward to checking in on Hogwarts with Minerva looking at Slytherin treatment, as she did appear generally more fair minded than others in the books. Whatever you write I'm sure I'll enjoy it!

I really like your story so far, and i was just wondering if you are still updating it? :) I'll keep reading and reviewing if you are! :)

I think its hilarious that you've currently got Dumbledore locked up in a Muggle prison! :) Great work! :)

I really like your story ) I hope next chapter will be soon.

This story is great. I hope you update it soon.

Assuring the older witch that he would arrive at 6pm sharp, he watched the little family walk out. He was struggling to wrap his head around the polite little boy who opened the door for Malfoys daughter and the Smyth woman was the son of his childhood enemy.

Okay this sentence has a grammatical error. It can be corrected as follows:
Assuring the older witch that he would arrive at 6pm sharp, he watched the little family walk out. He was struggling to wrap his head around the polite little boy who opened the door for Malfoys daughter and the Smyth woman, and was the son of his childhood enemy. -this makes it grammatically correct.

Helen smiled gently "You just showed your first bit of experimental magic my little witch. You were worried about Harry, and your magic tried to protect him. It was very strong too! You'll grow up to be a fine witch one day." - It should be accidental magic not experimental...

Your writing is good. You make the characters real and alive. Keep up the good job. I find few mistakes or misspelled words...so good job on that end too.