It got a little better and was cute

First of all, theres no lemon. I liked this story up until this point. Hinata is being an insecure baby, and Sasuke is almost emotionless...

FUCKING INO AND GAARA?! after he tried to say he wasn't interested in girls! HA

LOL POOR NARUTO

FIRE LORD OZAI? love the avatar reference lol

Thank god, a fanfic where sakura isnt obsessed with sasuke

Okay, I have finally finished reading it. Honestly I like the beginning of the story but after their break up, things doesn't seem in line any more. Hinata was first shown as bold towards sasuke and have guts, not easily discouraged to accompany him. Idk if this has something to do about the hyuuga curse because you didn't seem to briefly pay attention about it to discuss to us but as the story goes by, it became less humorous, more dramatic, doubt between their relationship and anxiety. Hinata is nervous around the person she loved as to why she always stutter around Naruto but when she get over it and loved sasuke the nervousness of her shifted to him unlike the bold as she was during the first chapters. I don't like also how you potrayed her as so weak and helpless when it come to fighting enemies but yes she is weak compare to team 7 in the actual canon Naruto but I'm sure she is brave enough not to back off even if her life were at stake esp if it's for the man she loved based on canon potrayed by kishi (pain attack, war). She became too dramatic, doubtful and so much anxiety that no matter how much I love hinata in Naruto but in this fanfic, I got irritated to her, like girl get over it and stop over thinking

Sasuke also became different. He became so quiet, coward when it comes to pursuing romance to hinata, altho I know Sasuke in canon obviously not open and vocal to anyone as to why he finally adjusting towards hinata to be more himself in this fanfic but I'm expecting for his character to be develop well as story goes by but unlike the first half of the chapter, where he seem to be more confident and initiating conversations towards hinata and initiating things in general now he became boring, not doing or initiating a thing and the lively interactions/conversation towards them seem to fade and was changed by anxiety, doubts and drama.

But honestly I like the chaos theory, they are more well portayed and written there, hopefully you to finish writing that

Idk if you are still reading your reviews after more than 5 yrs but so far I like it. I only reviewed about your AN. Yes as an author, you made Sakura with no ill intention for blabbering about their kiss but in reality, would you gonna just tell to the gf of your friend that they kissed once? Even with no ill intention but she should have keep it to herself or at least to empathize of what the gf might think. I think you made those for the intention of developing more their relationship after break up but nah its sensitive to the part of the gf regardless who may it be

"Shikamaru floated about face down (...dead?), " THIS MADE ME LAUGH SO FUCKING LOUD MEIDMDIJD I hope one day u write about shikamaru and temari. Ur take on them would be beautiful. They're so hilariously amazing. Even a one shot would be just amazing. I hope this whole quarantine thing gives u a lil time and u write more, even if it's ur own stuff as opposed to fanfic stuff, cuz I'd love to read ur work one day. I'm already a huge fan of ur writing.

ALSO THE FACT THAT ALL THE TEAM MEMBERS WERE CHEERING ON NEJI TO DROWN SASUKE WAS SENDING ME

yes, I'm rereading this too, mind yo business. SASUKE IS SUCH A LIL SHIT LMFAOOO HE REALLY MADE HINATA WORKED UP SO HE COULD TAKE THE ATTENTION AWAY FROM THE FACT THAT HE WAS BLUSHING. omfg I wanna beat him up so bad lmfao I love him so much. Ur characterization is him is so perfect. I love it

Royally love it. Thanks

I have looooved this story since its first iteration. I think you’re the reason I created an FF account all those years ago...? I KNOW you’re the reason I came back to this site. I love and appreciate your stories, style, humor, modesty, dedication...and, of course, your enduring love for crack pairings.

Lol hilarious

I like how subtle he is

I mean this is so beautiful and wholesome I can’t breathe