Oh a romantic story I loved it. But I need to sort your spellings out. Your spellings is so childish to me. I hate to say this some people hate the story and saying it's bad. I agree with the people with the spellings. But the story is my opinion I choose good. What a wonderful romantic story I ever loved. I was proud of this story. You put abuse in this love in it and smut. This my favourites.

Did you mean "I see you as a best friend." I couldn't understand the spelling? But I know what the word is.

What a lovely story!

The most passionate heartbreaking story. I loved it!

Dude. The fuck. Seriously. The fuck

I gave this a chance by finishing it and this is what I have to say:
1. Its And, not "An"
2. Sore* not soar..
3. The plot jumps around too fast. Try lengthening the plot.
4. Your sentences are poorly constructed and this BY FAR is the absolute WORST fanfic I've ever read. This is as bad as that fanfic with Konata from lucky star stuffing her fat face!
5. Please. For the love of GOD learn how to write. YOU ARE HORRIBLE.

I think I just wasted my time... Up to chapter 17 and its just not fair to cat, shouldn't jade you know get a little more punished? I felt so sorry for cat the whole way through, I thought this was going to be a good story... Smh i hate to say this im usually not so critical, but this was just so bad! Im gonna have to agree with the guy below me... Smhsmhsmhsmh

I'm going stop reading right here.

No offense, but your writing is too childish for me. Yes, the plot is actually decent and you're one of those writers in this fandom to get the paragraph thing correct. The flow of events is actually good and make sense. Yay.

But I advise you to improve your writing, though. I could excuse the typos everywhere because it still happens to the best of writers, but your sentences are poorly constructed. It's very irritating to read, even the dialogues.

Try it like this:

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I turned around and looked at him, my eyes seething with rage. "I did give you a chance, Robbie. And what did you do?" I hissed, my eyes welling in tears, "I gave you a chance and you fucking blew it."

"Cat, I-"

"Don't touch me!" I screeched when he attempted to grab my wrist. I furiously shook it off before looking at him straight in the eyes.

"I'm sorry!" the boy desperately stated, wringing his hands nervously. "I know I took it too far, but I know now that it was wrong." He then stepped back to give me a breathing distance, and I appreciate the gesture. "I promise I won't do it again."

I crossed my arms on my chest as I glared hard. My eyes stopped watering and I schooled my face in indifference. "Of course it won't happen again, 'cause we're done," I stated gravely.

The boy's eyes widened. "Cat! No! Please!" He then stepped closer, and I automatically flinched. Seeing my reaction, he stepped back again. "I really love you..."

I sighed, uncrossing my arms. Time to come clean, I guess. "No, I... It won't work out because I have feelings for someone else."

"You don't want to be with me anymore?"

"No, I never wanted to be with you," I corrected with a bit of an edge in my voice. But then I sighed again at the heartbreak in his eyes. "Look, I... You're a nice guy and I thought this could work out. But..." I trailed off, remembering the dark hair and the blue-grey eyes, "I'm just hopelessly in love with this person."

I saw him sigh before his shoulder slumped in defeat. We stood there, just basking the awkwardness of breaking up in public. I looked around and saw a couple of of eyes on us, but then they turned away when they saw me looking at them. I huffed before my eyes flitted towards a pair of blazing blue-greys.

My heart skipped a bit at that look. But before I could decipher the meaning behind it, I heard a sigh.

"I guess..." Robbie softly trailed off, his shoulders still slumped, "this is the end?"

"Of course not," I automatically replied as I observed his demeanor. He looks like a puppy kicked by his owner, his eyes sad conveying heartbreak.

"We can still hang out. You know, do friend stuff. Oh! We can even go bibble hunting!" I enthusiastically added. The boy is still sweet and he is still my friend. Besides, everyone makes mistakes, right?

I saw him quirked his lips in a smile and I smiled back. "Yes, that would be awesome, Cat," he said.

"Yay!" I chirped before engulfing him in a hug, completely brushing off the incident. He hugged me back and I didn't flinch, and I smiled at that. I just felt that warm security that always envelop me whenever he is near. It's similar to when my brother hugs me whenever I get scared of the movies.

But then I remembered the blazing eyes, and my own curious pair flitted towards her.
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See? Don't rush the dialogue. That technique can be good, but sometimes it's terrible. Cat and Robbie's break-up (or anyone's break-ups) are fraught with drama especially if the other one does harbor genuine feelings. You have to give that justice.

But then I read worse, so I'm just going to chalked it up to your inexperience. Hone your writing skills and good luck.

:) beautiful ending. I love the fluff in this chapter :D Great job on this story!

It was good. The word is actually sore but good job! :)

Ahhhhhh NEXT CHAPTER PLEASE!

Ah yes you updated :DD

Awww I wonder what's gonna happen next :3

Awww I can't wait for the next chapter! Great work

Omg omg omg omg!