Holy...
why are you so damn good at this!? Ugh so good!
One question, though; what so you mean, she will die from "the people's mouths"?

yeah! a sequel would be nice

Aww :') Love it a lot; you did a really great job on this :) Your writing is amazing, keep up the great work and maybe you should continue this, up to you, but I hope you do :)

Cute

Wow! You instantly grabbed my attention, I can't wait to see how the rest of this goes.

P.S. Makorra forever.