This was a very cute story, and I'm certain it would have been even cuter with your full story put in! I wouldn't fret over the Content Guidelines as much - there are QUITE a number of explicit fics out there popping up recently, and unfortunately some are much less adorable (or otherwise pleasant) than your fic is and would be. Your writing is lovely and I'm happy to see you updated!

While the writing quality of your story is good in terms of spelling and grammar, please note this part of the Content Guidelines:

"Please note FanFiction does not accept explicit content, Fiction Rating: MA, and the rating is only presented for reference."

You should remove all of the detailed descriptions of physical interaction of sexual or violent nature in this story if you want it to remain at this site, or upload it to a site where "Fiction MA" content is allowed such as AdultFanfiction.

awww! that was just so adorable!

Ahahaha, I love Shizaya! And Shizuo just following his desire without really realizing what's happening is really funny. :D Well done! xD

BWAH HAHAHAHAHA.
That little end part with flippant Izaya? Priceless. I can totally imagine Shizuo's face XD

Nicely written, I really enjoyed your story :) That part in car - I laughed so much xD Thanks and keep writing.

Thats was just perfect!You kept both of them in character till the you so much for writing 2nd to see another story of yours soon.(_)

Ooohhhh...ok welll the second chappie didnt really tie in with the first but hey it ended nicely:) when i saw thay u had a secod chapter n smut..i tot it happened IN the water paek becuz damn that would be A LOT OF FUN:) oh well good job anywho3

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I loved it! xDD

That was... -diesofnosebleed-

Haha it was so good! So funny! I loved it!

that was cute and all but still i wan't more shizaya moments please (yeah i know i'm being selfish but! 3) T3T please make a sequel onegai? *puppy eyes* lol, anyway that still need a good pat in the back and a "Good Job!" u

Nice chapter!So PLEASE update as soon as you can I want to read when Izaya will finally succeed on getting Shizuos attention again!(_)

Brilliant! And in character! *Claps*

Oh my days
I love this so much
And I can totally see it happening
Very very done