Nice hook introducing some mystery. Works great as a page turner and has an originality to it. Good detail on the characters, it made them seem more authentic. Keep writing, it's a good story so far.

That's it? End? Nuuuuu! ;-; What happens to the little girl? I need to know!

Really love this so far but I gotta have more! When is the next chapter ?

Where is the rest of the story?

Wow!

Nazi grammar at work. :)
First page. I can't navigate back to the first page of chapter 2. The sentence went like this. "Officer workers and students..." Office workers?
Second page. The waitress brought the coffees and set them down on the table. "You're breakfast will be up shortly."

More, please! You have me intrigued. Great start; want to see where this is heading.

I like it. Looks promising. Near the end you have "He felt a draft in the air . . ." - did you mean She instead of He?

So far so good. More? :)

Second from last sentence. First page. Typo? It says, "He felt a..." Shouldn't it be, "she"?

This is amazing

Keep it going :)

This is NOT in the right place. Please remove.