Please continue this story!

Oh my...
This is brilliant. Your first fic? Sweet Jebus...

I love the idea/concept, and it's execution was near flawless. Wonderful descriptions and general /godly/ quality all-round. No typos or grammar errors that I can see, besides spelling 'Kokoro', "Kokoru!" when little Kokoro tucked into Sakumo's dango. No angsty past, which is relieving, and her maturity is amusing as it is breath-taking. Expert story-telling, and the only thing I found note-worthy as an improvement, was how you said about the "light burning" in the eyes from childbirth, with "God trying to burn" her existence off the face of the earth. I would have substituted one of the 'burn's, but, otherwise, it was simply heart-shattering-ly /good/.

Wow.
-ONNMT

Adorbs.

Hey! Where's the rest of it?! Don't stop now!

Yay! I like this a lot! Please consider continuing with this story :D (though I'm not one to talk with always starting stories and forgetting about them...)

nice

I say YES. GREAT intro means a awesome story!

This is a great start! I hope you continue this fic and introduce Kakashi soon. Thank you for posting

I'm loving this fanfic! I adore proactive characters, so yours is amazing in my eyes! I'd also like to compliment you on your technique. Your character development is both realistic and downright brilliant. Kokoru's an inspiration, really, and she's what? Three? Spelling and grammar are all in order, I see, and your vocabulary displays intellect without being obnoxious or verbose (thank you for that).
For the sake of giving you some kind of constructive criticism, and I've thought hard about this as a result of my genuine love for this chapter, I can only bring forth a reminder to keep a close eye on your OC. It has nothing to do, really, with whether or not she becomes a Mary Sue. Believe it or not, someone actually once pulled a Mary Sue off. Kokoru is developing nicely, realistically, and is becoming a truly inspirational character. Even if she runs into problems, the balance between natural development and forced evolution of a character through trial and tribulation is a delicate one. Watch out for her - she's YOUR brain child. She deserves to be taken well care of - especially seeing as she seems to be such a wonderful person.
Can't wait to see what you have planned for the Naruverse!
Your newest fan,
Mari

Awesome story, really good for your first fic.
I'm looking forward to see how this turns out
Eldeweiss

Hmmm, what to think... Well! This is what I think- I personally love this kind of fics, meaning all the born into an anime world and shit-I actualy prefer it to the ones falling into it. I also read Dreaming of sunshine and I can happily say it is similar to it. Please continue and update this XD. Oh and if you like Full Metal alchemist and fics like this rea T. It isn't mine, I'm just recommending it ;)

I really like it!

Off to a good start.