| Reviews for Piece of Cake |
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jasdevi's secret sissy chapter 1 . 2/4/2014 hhahahahaha,near basically bought his way out of cleaning duty by using cake! |
Shadow Fox 2013 chapter 1 . 8/7/2013 :D So CUTE! Near cooking is something I'd LOVE to see ;) |
Gazlover12 chapter 1 . 7/25/2013 Hahhaah this was both cute and funny! Oh Near...so in character, lol. Excellent job with this! |
Exploading albino potato chapter 1 . 6/26/2013 I liked it when Gevanni said "You could hurt yourse-" and how he thought he had to supervise Near. Awwww. XD "Near mode" That was funny at the end when Near said he didn't know how to wash up XDDD |
AnonZ chapter 1 . 3/25/2013 I enjoyed the story, thank you for posting it! "...would usually have been reluctant to see him anywhere near" - "near"... oh my, I've probably been reading way too much work by Tierfal (wonderful stories where bad puns flow abundantly )! Some constructive criticism: Actually it did seem a bit too much like a recipe to me. If I were you I wouldn't actually change the baking instructions - to me those detailed descriptions seem to fit Near's analytical style, but maybe a few more of Gevanni's thoughts mixed in. Perhaps something about that protectiveness he seems to have developed? Or a bit more on what Gevanni thinks about the baking being in stark contrast to Near's usual behavior (it *is* a bit OOC, but if we can notice it, so can Gevanni). (Maybe then the "Drama" classification would make more sense; right now I haven't detected that much drama.) That bit with the cake being a mixture of L's, Mello's and Near's tastes is great; though I would like to know why he cares - what are his relationships with L and Mello? Is it the canon timeline (with L dead and Mello-Near conflict)? And I think the other guy's spelled "Rester". Sorry for being a neat freak like that. :) I loved the idea of "Near-mode"! And of course you've left me with an appetite for Frosted Choc-Orange Cake - should've expected that when clicking on a story with "cake" in its title... :D [So on another note the detailed instructions are really cool because that sounds like a cake I might be tempted to try myself!] Soo... end of this long review. :) I hope there's something useful for you in here and I'll be checking your account for new stories. Again: Thank you for posting! |
Arysthae chapter 1 . 2/4/2013 This story was pretty cutesy. It's a little OOC, I think Near would be a little too preoccupied with solving crime to bake, but you know, he seems to find time for a tonne of other things, and this was fairly in character as far as the actual cooking went XD Nice work! :) |