Something about the cold wetness of Scotland fits perfectly with your writing style. Reading your works always feels similar to reading poetry to me making me reread lines over again to try and understand the feel of them.

I also appreciate how suspenseful each chapter felt. The "problem" of one chapter was "answered" in the next forcing one to keep reading despite one's best efforts to take a break.

WOW, that was a ride. I need to know more. (Granted I get that works in progress are...it's hard...as you can tell by how often I have not updated my stuff.) Still, I, so to summarize Soul thinks that Maka is searching for wood sprites to fill a void she feels? He feels threatened by the wood sprites because he's hopelessly in love with her! Damn it children, just speak to one another! Ahhhhh my poor heart! This was awesome.

Dkgdkstsjfs! I'm so curious! All these subtle twists and turns are happening. He's so grumpy with her but he brings her inside his childhood?! What in your mind Soul? How does it tie to the woodsprites? Why was he so angry? I'm bursting with curiosity!

Fogdkgclhclyxd! That forrest scene! I'm so curios, who are these sprites, what did they see exactly?! Maka 's comforting breasts. (

He kicked her in the shin! You have no idea how much that means to me! He's equal parts torn by her undressing and not undressing enough!

This happens to me everytime, I make notes and then at the very end of a chapter the twist gets me! She found her sprites! Also, I'm a wreck for all Soul POVs just end me now! This was amazing, all of his observations. The way he is quietly pining, just the way he sees her... I love it all so much! I really enjoy the way you write, I apologize I can't write down the sentences (mobile urgh) but the add ons to the sentences are destroying me in such a great way. The scene where he returns from the bike ride and he watches her sleep and he blames her. Oh Soul, he's in so deep!

I'm a big fan of traipsing through the woods, so this chapter was interesting. I'm not sure what's going to happen; I'm intrigued!

Since you are so sincerely polite and warm, I suppose that it would look poorly if I did not leave a review. You are quite good at this writing thing; encountering writers such as yourself is one the things I enjoy most about Fan Fiction. Your writing style is so utterly and completely brilliant that I cannot help but admire you; it is so deeply pleasing to me that I cannot summon the proper words to describe the feeling.

What you can do in a handful of sentences would take me three paragraphs. Descriptive, yet sparing. Enough is left to the imagination such that the mind can run free and indulge wholly in the story. The character Soul Eater has been captured perfectly; rather than simply transplanting the Mr. Evans we are familiar with you have taken him and put him somewhere new flawlessly. As for Ms. Albarn, you replicate her better than most but she seems too... quiet. I understand part of the reason for the lack of dialogue due to the plot, and the development you have done with her so far is phenomenal.

Since you have asked for comments and critiques, my only other suggestion would be to do a little bit more descriptive world-building. Please don't fall into the Brian Jacques trap of describing everything in excruciating detail, but you may want to experiment with perhaps going deeper into the texture of a coat or the smell of the rain. Please, please don't change your writing style just to accommodate my suggestion, but if it so pleases you give it a try.

Since it is impossible to make the offer without sounding pompous and self-important, I shall do so without attempting to assure you of my wholly pure intentions: should you need someone to proof-read or bounce ideas of off, I offer to you my services. I do not suffer any illusions as to my own talent but if you are suspect of my motives, please look at the story I am currently knee-deep in. As an author I understand that it can be immensely difficult to keep a story moving, so if you need any help or advice feel free to contact me.

Thank you for your time, I am looking forward to the next chapter!

This is good. You write really well and I can *see* where each of the two are coming from, and the way they interact with each other around the issue.

wooo!
I'm so happy you're back, I can't wait to read more

I absolutely adore the way you write, it's so poetic and beautiful. I really can't wait to see where this story goes.

Ahh! You updated!
They're SO perfectly in-character, I don't know how you do it. The last part of this chapter reminded me of Howl's Moving Castle, somehow. Specifically, when Sophie steps into Howl's childhood. I could "see" all of the furniture and feel the mood, it's wonderful!
I'm very exited to follow along with this story and I'm so glad you've picked it up again.

I found this floating around tumblr. Please continue this beautiful story! D:

Yay! God, I love this style of writing. It's all, *waves arms wildly*. Abstract.
'S good.

Jegus, I love your version of Soul and Maka's interactions