Please update! I want to know how Peter will save Neal.

Noooooooo! You have to update! It was getting to the juicy part!

You need to continue it is awesome.

More Please

looking forward to more!

I think you may need a beta. Cause I really do like this story, but there are so many mistakes. I really don't know where to begin. You know what. I am going to copy your chapters onto a word document and I will fix the grammer problems for you and send it to you through a pm. I love this story. It is great, but a lot of people, including me, dont like reading stories with so many errors. I want to fix it because it's a great story. What I mean to ask is (getting down on one knee) will you do me the honor of allowing me to become your beta. Cause I love this story. I can relate. My first story had so many problems. I think I will end it here. Goodbye and update soon.

For starters, you need to seperate different people's talk, the things with quotations ", need to be placed in different paragraphs. You also need to capitalize the words at the beginning of the quotations and put a period at the end. Finaly, you need to put a comma after the word before a quotation. Example bellow.
Your writing: Tim said "hello"
Correct writing: Tim said, "Hello."
This is a really good plot just a lot of mistakes. I like it.

I like the story but there are a lot of spelling errors. Frank, in some places were lower case. You confused know and now.

I love this, Neal and supernatural :-))) Peter would leave Neal alone like that, he breaks my heart. Aww poor Neal. But he needs help.