It's soooooo good! Oh, man. This is amazing. I cannot wait to read more. I hope school isn't killing you! (And congrats on starting Med school in the first place!) But seriously, this is amazing. I had a HUGE grin on my face the entire time. Especially that last bit. Loved it. Cannot wait for more! Keep up the amazing work.

Tempest! Love it. Wish the story continued.

I look forward to the continuation of your story :)

I like the start, and I chuckled at this:

"Heh. Empty threats, Shepard. You know I operate outside the Alliance lines." He crossed his arms with a smug expression, eyes glittering at her in challenge.

"That may be. But I'm pretty sure I read somewhere in the Spectre manual that I've got Council authorization to torture whomever I see fit." She leaned in on tiptoe to whisper provocatively in his ear, her lips millimeters from the strange indentation that marked the organ. "And I know where you sleep, Vakarian."

I like the relationship between your Shepard and Garrus, and I'm looking forward to reading more. :)

I thought this was lost, but I kept he story anyway. Good to have you back. Take your time with this story. I'm loving it so far. Knowing you're busy with real life helps waiting for new updates

oh wow! love this, every bit and i can't wait to read more!

This is so sweet!

Can't wait for more! I love your writing style. Sorry about your laptop, though ;c

I'm so happy you've started to expand on the original one-shot. The one-shot was absolutely perfect and now the expanded version seems to be holding to that same standard. I cannot wait for more

I love being able to read the new, more slowly paced story next to your original draft. :) I enjoy them both a great deal, but your new version is really something special. You write Shep and Garrus so perfectly it'd be a crime to rush through their dynamic with a one-shot. Nicely done, as always. :D

Dang! I am so sorry to hear about your laptop. If it helps, I dropped mine into Puget Sound about 3 years ago. You're not alone!
This is a fun story. I like the changes you made to draw it out, but I have to tell you that the last line of the original chapter was the most adorable thing ever.

I'm trying to figure out how your laptop could fall into the Atlantic Ocean, but I'm not one to judge. I'm hazardous around everything.

I am really liking this. I really liked how Garrus was so vulnerable in chapter one...and Joker's wake-up call was hilarious. I liked the scene with the medigel...Garrus lost in the moment.

I also read the one-shoot. It was good but I think you have began to make it even better with the chapters. So much more detail is added.

Anyways, I'm enjoying this and I hope you are able to figure out your laptop situation. I hope there weren't too many important things that are irreplaceable on it for your grad school work.

Yes yes yes, very interested indeed.

Yes! This needs some follow up chapters! I wasn't sure what you intended at first but you moved so quick I was surprised it was already over. Just one chapter? After all that? No way. This needs either more chapters or a sequel or two. Don't you dare stop here. I want to see whst else you can dish out.

Blue

ohh yay more! cant wait!