Very good. I like narrative poems like this and you did a good job with the rhythm and rhyme of it. It's not perfect but I like it. You told the story very well and that's the point of a narrative poem anyways.

Nice! :)

Do you like Samuel Taylor Coleridge by any chance? ;)

Well..it was a bright and sunny day, not a dark and stormy night..but I suppose that doesn't really make much of a difference. Good poem, very amusing.

Brilliant! And hilarious. I giggled the whole way through. :)

I like it! Some scanning problems, and skippy meter, but I like! Very original idea! Congratulations!

very cool! you kept to the story line and it all kept rhythm. very cool!

Oh! Absoultely lovely! Loved it!