good update

I haven't had much of a computer access lately.; Drop the 'of a'.

Sasuke can't drive just yet and I haven't thought of his vehicle except maybe an electric scooter sooner or later.
You could make Sasuke now how to Parkour, otherwise known as free running, seeing as how he is/was a ninja and could do it in the anime/game. (Parkour is jumping from building to building, over cars, benches, etc. up and over walls twice your hight etc. (Also, I'd like to know where I can find every series. Crunchyroll doesn't have it and there's only nine episodes of the first season on YouTube. :( )

or why his hair was pulled back into as ponytail; I'm sure you know this, but take away the s.

They were familiar and loving and…and…; I mentioned this in the last review, when there's a description of something or listing something, take away the 'and' and swap it for a comma until the last two things, then put 'and', i.e he had black eyes, long, brown hair and white skin.

At the beginning of the this chapter he wouldn't wonder who it was or ask any questions until after he woke up, because in dreams you don't wonder the same things you would do if you were awake.

before sitting down next to his big brother.
I thought he was sitting behind him.

Sue him! Wait don't do that. He might actually win it...somehow.
:D XD This sounds like something he'd do! Get someone to sue him for something just so he would win it. :P So much fun!

I had gotten lost on the path of life
Hm, now I wonder where I've heard /that/ before. :P

no needs to be here really,; swap no for doesn't and drop the s at the end of 'needs'.

"Can we pick our partners?" Ieyasu said quietly. He asked a question, so drop the 'said' and put in asked.

"Sorry, Tokugawa-kun, I'm picking partners.
No! D:
'll get started with some of the most obvious. Date-kun and Sanada-kun are partners.
Yosh! :D

Also, why does the teacher call some people san and not kun? Kun is, basically, younger than with respect and san is older than with respect. Not exact translations.

Kojuro has been driving us the pass couple of days.; Add ed to the end of pass.

person he was going to stuck with for the next couple of months.; You forgot to put 'be' in here.

Motochika only grinned at hearing him talk some.; Put in 'more'.

he gave Motonari a quick kiss on the cheek
I don't think she'd be able to do that even if they were dating, 'cause motonari-baka's such an a$$hole.

A small smile graced lips; here, you need to say 'face', not 'lips', because the lips is on the face and the lips are the only things that can actually smile; you can't smile with your ears, for example. Surprisingly, a lot of people make this mistake, even if their first language is English. :-/

Instead of saying teen say boy or girl, depending on the gender of the character. We already know what age they're around, so there's no need to repeat it.

Also, when's chapter 6 coming out? This is one of the best DateSana stories that I've read so far, sadly there's not many good ones. :-(

As for their personalities. I based them off my friends and myself.; After 'personalities' put a comma instead of a full stop.

It was shocking that all four of them actually had the same lunch period and even stranger that they all were going to sit on the roof.
I'm not sure how Japanese schools work, but do they really have different lunch times? I think that's weird.

He stopped himself and just took a bite out of his steamed pork bun. It was highly delicious.; Very, not highly. Highly would apply to, let's say, highly sensitive, for example.

He may not show it often how much he honestly enjoys being around them,; a normal way of saying this is: He may not show it often, but he really enjoys being around them.

and listening to Persona 3 music which most of it has English lyrics.; Change most to mostly and take away 'of it'.

They started laughing at each other as if everything that had just happened was never there.; A better way of saying it would be, 'never did' or 'never happened'.

It just wasn't natural people!; Put a comma after the word natural.

He didn't think that his cousin was talking about Yukimura,; instead of talking, say thinking.

It was a confusing process and he didn't like it one bit.; Instead say, It was confusing or It was really confusing. Drop the 'a' and 'process'.

He figured that she was packed it for; swap 'was' for 'had'.

He had eaten his fish and rice and pork bun already.; You put in to many ands. Swap the first and with a comma.

In fact, that was the only thing that would get him in the house was her calling for dinner.; After calling put 'him'. It's grammatically correct in English.

"Yes. I find the study of plants to be fascinating. They are like humans, but much more kind as they allow many organisms to live near them or inside them," Motonari said with a smile.
It seems that one of Motonari-baka's excruciatingly few interests is to contradict himself and/or things/people that contradict him. :/ :-l

This was someone that they knew nothing about and that as scaring all but Yukimura.; Say was instead of as.

Motonari sighed as he realized that he had gotten the attention of an idiot.
Well, someone /he thinks/ of as an idiot, anyway.

It was just something that he knew for sure that he couldn't deal with it on a daily basis.; Drop the second 'that' and 'it'.

XD I /love/ Masamune-sama and Motochika-san so much! They make getting into trouble with the teachers every day look/seem tempting. :) :D

Senpai has an n, no m. A lot of people make that mistake.

It becomes you like you should become mine!"; This doesn't make sense. What do you mean by 'it' anyway?

Oh, yeah. I forgot to say, don't forget to put a space after three full stops (...) and a capital letter after it if there is a new sentence after it.

I know you're the school smart one,; what do you mean by 'school?

The only thing that mattered was the person that they were staring.; You left out the word at.

when my laptop and several other possessions of mine went bye-bye.; This made me laugh. XD

A steel blue opened; a steel blue what opened?

The owner of said eye; you never mentioned an eye.

When the sigh was over, ; _ no-one says this. It's grammatically incorrect, sounds silly and it's not even needed.

After he got through in the bathroom; you mean was through.

A lot of people make the mistake of putting speach marks around things that aren't being said, even the authors of books. 'Dangerously attractive' instead of "dangerously attractive"; the speach marks implies it's being said.

When Masamune, the brown haired blue eyed teen, blinked slowly before it fully kicked in that he needed to stop the fire before the alarm started. Take away the word when, it implies that there is more to say, example, 'When my mum walked in the door, she tripped and fell, dropping the groceries'.

You use the word teen WAY too much.

"Oh, you're welcome. Someone had to save my ass so that the world can know the wonderful being that is me!" This made me laugh. :D

"Stop calling by that infernal name; put 'me' in after the word calling.

Before Masamune could say or think of anything, Motochika grabbed him by his arm and drug him out of the kitchen.; Dragged. A drug is something that is as bad for you as shooting yourself in the head. I'm not kidding.

As he walked out the door, he his face held a huge frown.; Take away the 'he' and swap 'held for 'had'.

"Will you stop calling me that.; Put a question mark after this because it's a question.

All he needed to actually do was jump in the shower, brush his teeth, ; shouldn't he eat first? Because if he didn't, 1. His food would taste weird, 2. he wouldn't get the food off his teeth if he brushed /before/ he ate and 3. if he didn't eat breakfast he wouldn't have enough energy to make it through the day.

This story is so hilarious! If Kotaro is paired up with someone, I wish them luck on getting him to talk Also is Mitsunari going to be in this story?

O.O OMG

Your Masa is nice but perverted-bastard and I DAMN LIKE IT! *screams*
And your Yuki is so pure that it's maddening I gonna tear my books. Yes, I liked them so much

But...
THE SMUT! *stressed* It was so good and I found myself keep smiling but at the end of the smut... I... Screamed...

Fine, waiting for the next chapter! Hope the next chapter will be updated soon! Love your Masa and Yuki! XD

They're barely in high school, and Masamune is already gay, and Yukimura could probably pass for a cute tomboy. That is, a boyish girl.
Chevy Impala.. Because they had to have a car with the name Impala, didn't they. And what, Sasuke has some kind of vehicle with a bird theme or something?
lol "normal folks?" Oh Sasuke's gonna get along w/ Kojuurou so well.
This is such an awesome story! And I don't mean just for a high school AU, either. This is so going on my fave story list!
Thank you so much for your work! w

I love your fic! So damn cute and hilarious XD
Yukimura is the cuties here right right! I cant wait to see date started to attack him

Woah! Please continue this story! I'm waiting for more!

Oh yeah, btw about Masamune... Judging from his speaking behavior, you shouldn't make him call Yukimura with 'Sanada-kun' for now... Because, he always call him with 'Sanada' or 'Sanada Yukimura' ini the anime/manga/game and 'Yukimura' in most fanficts. I don't think by calling Yukimura with '-kun' and such will make him still in his original talking behavior. This is just my opinion so, it's okay if you don't accept it. Really, it's okay! :D

Waiting for the next update...

I'm glad to read this story, it seem really promising. I usually don't like high school AU that much, but the way you portray the characters is refreshing. Please don't ditch this story halfway, it happen to much.

Thank you

Is Kotaro ever going to be in here? Tellz me! Kotaro's my favorite character so, please?

please keep updating don't abandon this fanfic it is really good from capilization to character accuracy ( how the characters would really act in that situation) it is a great story ik not many people have reviewed ur story but keep going i will review as many times it takes so keep writing
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