Awesome!

GOOD VERY GOOD

Awesome story going to go read the second part to this what's your other account on this if you don't mind me asking ? ;)

I loved it! Fantastic job!

This makes no sense. it needs more detail

this story was wonderful :) good work :)

Aw! Sweet! Well-written! Thanks!

rally great

I really liked it!

I really appreciate that. Very accurate in my opinion.

aww, i gotta read the next one, and i m so glad i read this first! :D

awh... i love it

Awwww, this is so nice! A really good idea too.

And just cause you said Critiques were welcome... if I were to change/fix anything.. It felt a little short.. a little rushed? But other than that I thought it was a good read and I enjoyed it! Aw, it's about time the other guardians understood what was happening from Jacks point of view. Thanks for sharing!

(PS- It'd be really interesting to see Bunnys reaction to Jack making Jamie believe in him too- if you ever wanted to do something with that you totally should!)

I like your style. keep it up!

just one time where it's "shone" instead of "shown"

but i love this, really. i like how you put together all the different scenes that made up the movie jack's POV and his different thoughts tying together, and them watching each other's memories? a great way for them to connect.

and bunny at the end really maturing, thinking about how to help jack...:D aww...:)

i love how you put together jack's thoughts, relating very clearly to each scene, and how you shone a different light to his actions. great job.

i'm developing a writing style myself, so don't ask me for help in that department. ' eek. have so much to learn about writing!

Now that I finally watched the movie, I can chime in. You really did a good job emulating what Jack felt through this emotional journey. Nice job :D