I just finished reading your story and it was quite literally enthralling. Sadly I have never been able to play Journey myself but I have watched several excellent play-throughs and so I am familiar with it. Your descriptions and wordcraft is done so well I can easily visualize where you are in the game and what you and the characters are doing. Reading about the interaction between your character and your other two companions was quite enjoyable and realistic given the game setting. I missed Wing, of course, and hoped he would return but Aether proved to be just as enjoyable to read about. The history you created for the creatures and, in particular, their physical makeup, was quite ingenious and logical given what we know they are capable of. Finally the emotion you manage to consistently convey was quite potent in its own right and added a great deal of depth to the story.

All in all I enjoyed this story very much! *many happy chirps*

This was beautiful. Thank you for this. :) I felt like this captured many of the feelings that the game evokes in its players, namely the melancholic atmosphere. I felt your interpretation of the rise and fall of the civilization was poignant and respectful. It certainly makes sense, going off of the murals and the confluences. Another thing you managed to capture well is the connection you form with your companion(s). When Wing was lost, I felt genuinely sad (although I very much enjoyed the development of Aether's character). At the same time, you also portrayed the sense of loneliness in the game very well, and this was probably helped by the backstory you provided. The slow building of the protagonist's past made the ending effectively emotional, particularly that last line.

I have just one area of criticism, and that has to do with your grammar – namely punctuation. There are several places throughout the story where commas are needed, but aren't present. Just from the last chapter alone, I can find many examples, but I'll just use the first one I came across: 'Cold lassitude had overwhelmed me making my thoughts disjointed and confused.' It should be: 'Cold lassitude had overwhelmed me, making my thoughts disjointed and confused.' This may seem minor, but it just improves the experience for the reader, especially a grammar Nazi like me. ;P

Other than that, I really enjoyed reading this, and I certainly don't mind it being a walkthrough-type fic.

You found the flower, but not the strange creature swimming in the cistern. I guess you and Aether were so eager to see the end of your journey that you didn't feel like back-tracking. _ ping ping chirp PWONNNG!

amasing! its really different from all of the other's i've read