I'll be honest. The bad-boy-falls-in-love-with-good-girl story-line isn't new in the world of fanfic and you did absolutely nothing to give it an extra kick. There was no zest, no pizazz, no spice. It was dull and middle American.

The way Ronnie uncovered the Bat-clan's civilian IDs seemed stupid. Sure Tim put two and two together, but he also had several years of stalking under his belt before he came up with four. Ronnie spends all of 24 hours eyeballing the pieces and gets it right on her first try. She wasn't established as a perceptive person with keen powers of observation, so the scene comes out like a deus ex machina intended solely to get the ball rolling on the love story.

Speaking of the love story, I've read better. By skipping weeks at a time, you destroyed any potential will-they-won't-they tension. You destroyed practically all of the fun that comes with watching two people awkwardly orbit each other. We didn't get to watch the relationship between Jason and Ronnie develop. It's like 'o hai, kiss me fool!' Jason's impulsive, I know, but he's respectful of women and he wouldn't just jump on Ronnie and kiss her without her consent. Nor would he divulge the painful details of his life to a near-total stranger who knows all of jack-sh*t what the Bat-clan gets up to. The romance was poorly handled, as was the friendship between Tim and Ronnie. I think Tim should have spent more time trying to throw Ronnie off the scent when she confronted him about his night-life rather than giving in two sentences later. You could have gotten a short sub-plot out of that.

This was a dull story made worse by an under-experienced writer.

I was not wowed.

No! Jason is leaving! But he does come back... Right?

Cool! You know Angel with a Shotgun too. It's one of my favorite song secure it reminds me of Jason ;)

Yessss! They kiss!

Aww! Concerned Jason and crying Ronnie! I love you and your stories!

I really loved the ending. It scared the hell out of me.

Ronnie is going to find out!

Ooh la la! Red Hood and Ronnie! Love is blossoming. Nice chapter!

Nice start and yes, I too, have been falling head over heels for Jason Todd.

OMGOMGOMG fabulous! This story is absolutely amazing!
Cant wait for more!

Is Ronnie gonna turn into a superhero? Sorry...Really stupid question

Hell yes I will stay tuned for part 2 this story is awesome!

Awww so freaking adorable! -insert girly squeal here-

Now the question is are you going to update one more time before I log off lol things are getting good

Did you actually get two chapters out today or am I just not receiving notifications? Either way, color me impressed! Because I was greedy and read both chapters back to back, this will have to serve as a review for both chapters (I know you are so disappointed that you only get one blathering review).

Chapter 7:
Let me start off saying the I love Ronnie's insecurity as a character. I find it really relateable due to her past and the situation she finds herself in. It made me smile a little after Jason turns with all the intention to leave after being more or less scolded when he was only trying to do something nice. I could see it playing out in my head and it was marvelous. I also really like how you have allowed Jason to be soft with Ronnie (what with teasing her) without losing his intensity and his trademark smirk. Love that you talk about the cracking walls. Your word choice and descriptions are very vivid and flowing. The mini awkward moment where she more or less misspeaks was a wonderful way to end that chapter!

As you know, I give the good with the bad so here goes I suppose. There aren't very many, but I did catch a few grammar mistakes. Nothing daunting, but when Ronnie asks Jason if he was the one responsible for the bashing, he said Yeah, I didn't. I'm sure you meant something along the lines of "Yeah, I did it" so it's not like it derailed the story or anything. A little more time spent editing will take care of those minor errors. I suppose this one really isn't so much a critique as a suggestion: with long monologues, try adding movement and break it up into chunks... For example, if a character shifts or breaks eye contact or something tell the reader when you see it happening. It makes it seem more authentic (to me). Moving and gesturing is what people naturally do in conversations. Very rarely will you find people just literally sitting and talking. I personally felt that the kiss happened a bit fast... or I should say her reaction to it changed rapidly. The kiss wasn't so much out of character for Jason since he is very much a "take what I want" character, but Ronnie went from "I'm not that kind of girl" to "Let's face-battle!" like someone flipped a switch (I did love the imaginary though. Very nice!).

Chapter 8:
Her talk with Tim was inspired. It's nice to see that they are getting closer as friends as well rather than just having a scholarship in common. I also liked how you more or less cemented her flaws. I know that sometimes giving your character flaws can be hard since more or less they are an extension of ourselves and we want them better than us, so I think congratulations are in order that you've come out and told us what to look for should altercations happen between Ronnie and anyone else. The explanation of her late night walks does shed light on her midnight excursions. It's nice that she can still have something that reminds her of her father that the two of them shared. Of course you would leave on a cliff hanger, but I did like how you introduced the Joker. From the little snippet I would say he was in character, madness and all.

I think there is really only one thing that struck me on this chapter and that is the degree of cannon that you are following. Allow me to explain. You went into detail with Jason's death what with including his mother (something only those who have either researched the character or read the source material know) and Tim's background is spot on, but Jason wanted nothing to do with anything Batman (Robins included) after The Bat more or less turned his back on Jason when he refused to chose between him and the Joker. I mean he went on to try and sabotage Nightwing by making committing a murder in the costume. I suppose it just struck me since everything else was so... authentic? You've obviously done your homework so I suppose it just feels a bit like a quickly filled plot-hole explanation on how he knows about Ronnie. Other than that, I can't really find fault with the chapter.

All in all, a wonderful two chapters. I am still being nit-picky of course, but only because I think it's a disservice to someone with your talent to not help you improve. I did very much enjoy the chapters and look forward to more very soon.