Cool story. I never had read something like this is very interesting. And poor girl she's gonna suffer a lot if you decide to continue this (which I hope you are) Thanks for taking the time to write it

Well, the beginning is interesting. waiting for an update!

Definitely continue! That a very interesting well-written piece. I'm interested in seeing where you want to take this story and these characters. Will she ever get back? My only critique is clarity. Toward the end of the chapter I got confused at the order of events. Overall it was a great start, and I can't wait to read more!

Oooh this is a clever idea! I can't wait to see how this goes!