I love the concept, but your execution is sometimes rough. Particularly dialogue. The easiest criticism to articulate is frequent "maid and butler" dialogue in the opening bits (that is to say, two characters discussing in detail things which both of them already know for no in-story reason. It is entirely forced for the sake of the plot and makes no sense.) to be fair, you have a very unusual set up and needed to convey a lot of information early on, and in a oneshot you don't have a lot of space. Still, it was a bit clumsy.

I reiterate, however, that the idea behind this story was clever. Most of this post is criticism, but make no mistake: I am glad I read this.

Wow, this is depressing in a really weird way. Wonderful work.

For a long short story, the ending was Marvelous! what a cliffhanger, plus a good ending. Well Done!

A brilliant retelling of the 'Hero' movie in the Harry Potter universe. Kudos for that!

.. lame and totally nonlogical.

Well written crap. The ending was especially horrid.

Very well written, but a tad too strange for my liking.

Wow. This was odd but good; very well-written. I liked it.

The ending... sucked. There was no need for him to die at all, except the bloody Elder Wand business.

And what about Hermione and the baby?

I have to go and read some fluff to get this ending out of my head!

A fairly anticlimactic ending. I'm not sure if Harry's actions in the end fit with his earlier characterisation, or if it's just because I find it dissapointing for him to just give up. Not to mention why a war-hardened man like Harry would believe a word his enemies say.

Interesting story.

The theme seems to be very close to the jet Li movie "Hero"... But still good

That is the strangest fanfic I have ever read. It is also one of the best.

I don't agree with Voldemort, I'm with Harry James Potter Evans Veras. The magicals should not be allowed to dominate the world. Still it's a fascinating thing. I can understand how magicals would be in favor of this Voldemort.

Great story. Though I feel the scene in the end is too rushed. For Harry to change his mind that quickly is a little strange.

Why non-magicals didn't just nuke him? You said yourself that Grindevald stopped his conquest from fear of nuclear war.