this was pretty good too, god even better at the end! maybe will read more of your storeis! keep it up grimjaw!

holy shit, grimjaw, this is pretty good, man. i busted a nut in my pants.

This has a really good plot. You just need to check spelling and sentence structure.

good story

It was ok but u seriously need to watch out for grammar, spelling and punctuations.

loved it hope u could make another chapter plzz

Hye gyus its me mr grimjaw on my new acuont if you see any revimews form this acuont just know its meugh mrgrimjaw! I love my sotries!

Other then a few places where capitalization needs to happen you are doing fine on this story. Don't listen to those flamers. I saw your post on FB that's how i know what is going on. if you need a Beta i can do it. i may not be familiar with this fandom but i am willing to help any way i can.

The fic is decent, but please hire a proper beta.

... What the FUCK did I just read...?

No offence, but this was shit, and if U have a beta, He/She ain't Doin' a good job.

Also, Correct Ur spelling. And please, for the love of Kami, spell Ur Title correctly.

And what's up with these people CHEATING on each other when they already have somebody, or when Sakura's kissing Naruto when he's already got Ino and she KNOWS that?

...This is fucked up, and U seriously need some help on grammer, Beta's, Plots, how you portray people and a hell of a lot more.

I give up reading this.
This was awful, everything I mentioned in the last review is still here.

Wow, this is one of the worst pieces of fiction I have seen lately. Please improve on your grammar and basic punctuation.

Hmm, your grammar is poor, your vocabulary seems inconsistent, and even the title is spelled wrongly.
I think that you're a troll.

Even the punctuation is somewhat terrible.

I think that you should really rewrite this and use spellcheck, because I can't even decipher what you're saying by the end of the first sentence.

You're capitalization needs work, and please, please just rewrite it.

Hmmm... Your stories have potential, but who's your beta? Noffense, but he/she should be canned at doing such a poor job at beta-reading.

this was really cute

i thought this was really amazing