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This was hilarious , though there were a lot of typos . But it was too funny to make me care about that . God , I laughed so much ! Good job , keep it up !
lazyass out !

You should totally write more!

Hey, you had a great idea here but you kinda made it hard with what appears to be a choppy or unconnected sense of flow. Maybe it has to do with your grammar mistakes or your missing transitions. I'm not trying to be mean, honestly, I think this had a lot of potential but needed some clarification. Cause it kinda confused me but you left me thinking with a lot of questions such as who was the friend Kyoko thought Ren was when she called him a bitch and slapped his butt? What role were they actually supposed to be practicing? Was she really trying to catch Ren's attention when she had that interview and said no one older than 4 to 5 years? What was up with the fake puking? I got the ending just fine even if Ren didn't. *giggle* ]

Ren gonna to have a heart attack. LOLO

Im so confused lol