Several million creds, no wife, hundreds of years into the future; yeah this guy is set up for some fun times.

This is just... Conrad. Is that an adjective as much as a proper noun? I mean it was just how I would see the fool being thrust into the ME world. Airhead, idiot... Just.. man.

It's well written, you cover so much with him in one chapter and I love the part about Shep 6- genius work!

Love it!Bronzey

You just made me want to be as cool as an Elcor, which is not something I would ever have expected. Ever. Elcor are not badass, except, you just made them badass so... things.

Poor Lisa. I hope something good happens to her.

I like the action, and enjoyed the way Conrad is changing things, and the way he seems to have grown from the first chapter.

I'm having trouble liking Nelyna because she's not Lisa, which is a strange thing to admit.

Lol, one of the funnier and more light hearted 'self-inserts' I've read. Honestly this turn of events explains why Conrad is such a die hard. But he's be really useful if he actually informs Shepard on the upcoming danger/backstabbing. Though of course he wouldn't be Conrad Verner of he was useful :P
Great start, there is nothing to fix. I like your narration style, it fits the story and gives us a safe boundary away from Conrad's nutty head. Keep up the humor and we'll see whe you go from here.

Oh, that's the weirdest story ever! Conrad in parallel world? I have no word to say but amazing! But that's just a start. I bet you would write more about unluckiness of Conrad. But can you just explain how or why did Conrad come to Mass Effect Universe, that's a question on this fanfic, hope you explain in further chapter.

Ah, Conrad. It seems his career had a trajectory somewhat reminiscent of a mortar shell. You've certainly made it rough for him, but I'm going to have to go out on a limb and trust that the next chapter will be hilarious.

Fun and goofy, I like it. It's been a while since I've seen a straight up comedy fic, so hopefully this will be a nice change of pace in between catching up with your more serious work. Now, as a self-insert writer, I think is the place where I'm supposed to raise a stink, so rabble rabble rabble!

You're going to kill Nelyna? That's just to much for poor Conrad... I've been feeling sorry for him the entire story :(.

When I wasn't laughing my ass off, of course. But seriously, you should consider letting her live. :)

With childlike excitement, yay Elcor, yay Elcor, yay Elcor, yay Elcor, yay Elcor, yay Elcor, yay Elcor, with amusement, just imagine that going on for ten to fifteen minutes and you shall get my point. Also yes I did expect you to and I want them as well. Good chapter.

Oh. I really hope Lisa doesn't get a dream-glimpse of that.

Interesting direction. Interested to see where it's going.

(Also, didn't catch any errors in this one.)

Errors:
- That was to much for Lisa (too)
- disappointed He (missing punctuation)
- mini-steathl field (stealth)
- "Listen to Liara Commander." (Liara, Commander.)

Oh. Poor Lisa. :/

And Conrad. Gah. It's so frustrating watching this. I know it's going somewhere, but it's hard to read. I want happy, darn it!

I'm glad he's got someone to talk to, at least. I hope *that* doesn't backfire, too.

(I hope you don't mind me pointing out errors/typos? If you do, drop me a PM and I'll stop, but since I'm basically shot-gunning your story to review for the challenge, I'm gonna get at least as far as chapter 5 with this.)

A couple errors:
- "Dr. Verner, I can't than you enough." (Thank)

Oh man. It's so hard to read this because I'm rooting for Conrad and nothing is going his way. Does that change? Please tell me it changes! (Actually, don't tell me. I'll read it.)

A few errors I caught:
- You say "hansom" a few times when you should have "handsome"
- "And your joining the crew? You off your meds?" This should be "You're"

Oh my goodness. Yes, this did escalate quickly. Poor Lisa and Conrad.

I'm interested to see where you're going, because honestly I found Conrad ridiculous and annoying, and it's both awesome and irritating that you're humanizing him and rounding him out. Because now I will forever have this back-story in my head, and I'll actually feel bad for him. :/

Hm, so there's hope for Conrad yet, good to know he has at least one person that believes in him. Will his wife realize the truth? You open a lot of questions, I'll definitely follow their resolution, keep going!

"...brief meating..." Hm, this reminds me that I have to make my dinner, hehe, but now the fic adds nightmare fuel with this things of RL!Conrad really turning into ME!Conrad and now he's going to become the Cassandra. To tell the truth, I thought this was going to be a parody, but I'm still interested and I'll be following it!