Please do not take this the wrong way. It is sincerely meant to be helpful, not destructive or mean in any way shape or form. And it is ONLY because I like your story so much that I am sitting here writing this. Generally if there is something I don't like about a fic, I leave it and move on. Yours however is so good, I felt compelled to say something.

As I said, up to Earplugs 2, it has had a very good story base. There is no missing the potential it holds. And I very much like the fact that it written primarily from a first person perspective, giving it a rather unique flavor, in my opinion.

However, I am ready to pound my head against the desk at which I sit in sheer frustration. I can't stress to you how amazingly difficult it is to read something not properly written. What I mean is, when a new person begins speaking, their words are supposed to be on a separate line. And, to better show you what I'm saying, I will use lines from your own fic:

“No we don’t,

Wow. That was neat. Actually, I thought Yugi would just BARELY win. But no, he rubbed it in the Black Man's face! _

Update soon!

japanfan

Short chapterz, but great story. Im not much of a duelist, but i think the "yami" card wipes out all monsters on the field... :P anyways I luved it makes a great late night story to read them all at once. O yeah wouldja consider finishing it and adding the last chapter(s)? Like why was Layhon twitching? And does the black dude keep his promise or does he do that "im a sore loser" thing and keep adding conditions (and that usually ends up with yami getting pissed off and just blastin him :P) And why the hell do i try to read 13 chapters at once plus all da other yugioh stories in one night? *im getting too tired* ill c ya l8r and good luck with the rest! _

Short chapterz, but great story. Im not much of a duelist, but i think the "yami" card wipes out all monsters on the field... :P anyways I luved it makes a great late night story to read them all at once. O yeah wouldja consider finishing it and adding the last chapter(s)? Like why was Layhon twitching? And does the black dude keep his promise or does he do that "im a sore loser" thing and keep adding conditions (and that usually ends up with yami getting pissed off and just blastin him :P) And why the hell do i try to read 13 chapters at once plus all da other yugioh stories in one night? *im getting too tired* ill c ya l8r and good luck with the rest! _

I like this story. I like it a lot. Please keep writing more. Its really good. Dont stop! _

Interesting. I'd like to see the rest of it. no your fic is not stupid and i think its better than some ive read. Wats up with Layhon? anyway, good work.

Not bad! I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I hope you keep writing this, and good luck!

japanfan

Wow. I haven't had time to review your fanfic, so here's one _ I might review the other chapters, just depends if you put a whole lot of chapters or not. Well, gotta read the next chapter!

japanfan

Grr... I dislike cliffhangers. I like your story so far, but you have to write MORE! ~grin~ Time permitting, of course. I like your plot, and I like the way you showed it from Yami's perspective for the first few chapters. Great job and keep writing!

The chapters are great, please keep on writing.

Very good! Please update soon!

Ok, I'm going to review now. I had to read all the chapters there were before reviewing. Anyway, GREAT FIC! I think Yami is way too cool, but put more Bakura in it. Please? He rocks!

Anyway, great fic.

**~~Katrina Kiaba~~**

Please write more! i really want to know what happends next. the ideas are original, and the story's good. i want more!

What was that dream about? Is the guy who saved Yami's life, Layhon? This is interesting, you should continue soon. I can't wait to find out what the plot is.

You typed that you wanted rewiews, so here's one: Very well written, nice plot, and you're right, the duel was kind of boring. However, with some practice the duels will be as good as the rest of your story. Good luck _.