Ugh, you need a beta-reader.

Having read some of the past reviews, as always, I still wanted to read it for myself, but when the first chapter already has the amount of spelling mistakes in; equivalent to the amount of cheese I put on my pasta, I got to stop.
A huge pet peeve of mine is: if one can’t write Names of Characters of the story correctly.
As others said:
Its Evans.
Also: it’s Daily Prophet.
There’s words missing that take away the flow of the story. Many phrases start with: She. She. She. Which also makes it boring for the flow.
But the idea has so much potential.
I would suggest a beta to go through the entire story again. Because I must say, I don’t mind grammar mistakes too much but I can’t go on in your story..

Suggestion for readers: if you have a peeve for grammar mistakes, or especially spelling mistakes, this story might not be the best idea..

Overall I’m enjoying your story, but there are some grammatical issues that really irk me. “Seen”...should be used when you say thinks like “she had seen something similar before” but not “picked up a letter and seen that...” that would need to be “saw”. I’ve ran across this in multiple chapters so far. It’s just a personal peeve of mine and it is incorrect usage of the word.

Good premise, but unfortunately I had to stop reading. The grammatical errors were just making it too hard to read.
I'd recommend finding a good beta and re-post once everything has been corrected.

Absolutely loved it

what the name to the new story?

Lovely story! You do (did?) Have problems with punctuation and there are some other grammar issues, but what should be the easiest and most important to improve are these: their, there, you're, your... How has Severus shifted so suddenly from 'maybe friends' to 'I want life with her as my wife'?
All in all, I did enjoy your fic, so thank you for the great reading piece!

I absolutely love the story so far. However, it is spoiled by the occasional bad english. It grates and spoils the experience of reading a very promising story. Might I suggest you use a bata reader to correct those little issues. Again, I love the story and admire your effort.

What?! Weird place to end it! Should have stopped after last chapter. Not feeling a positive review now that you've ruined the happily ever after. What were you thinking?! Thank you for sharing the first twenty-one chapters, and a whopping no thanks for the last chapter.

Wow! So many children! Crazy!

I love this idea, but it's the Daily Prophet, not the daily profit, and Lily Evans, not Evens.

interested...but i want to know the pairing. rating. and summary :/ but ill give it a try when you start posting XD XX

I'm intrigued

Okay ... promising so far ... I'd like to see more. :D

I think u need a beta reader as there are quite a lot of spelling errors but good story so far nevertheless x