Epic!

Epic!

I know you said you weren't going to continue this, but I thought I'd take the time to write a review all the same.
In the first half, I had a bit of a hard time following things, though that was mostly because dialogue wasn't separated over new lines. You fixed this later, though, which made thing infinitely easier. There were also times when, at the start of a new chapter, a considerable amount of time had passed and significant events with it, that left me a little confused.
But other than that, I disagree with your comment that it was poorly written. You used a very fluent and in-character diction and tone that gave your story a lot of merit. I found it quite enjoyable and pleasing to read. I'm sad to hear that you will not be continuing it, but I'm grateful for having gotten the chance to read even these twelve chapters (thank you for not taking the story down). :3

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Awww! Please don't! You're story was really well written! I looked forward to read all the updates at any hours and always craved for more! You can still do it! Please?

Awww I was really liking this story I am disappointed :(

i wanna read more but no johnlock please i think of them as more brothers

Love it darlin. Just remember that Sherlock had that thing where he could sense things before hand. I believe it is time for him. And muscles remember skills,even If the brain doesn't. So if he goes into to combat he would know what to do but not realize that. Trust me on this.

OMG! there's so much to be said about this chapter. Wow, a lot happened. Im very pleased with this chapter. Very nice work, the mysterys and twist. LOVE IT! Its a crime drama yet has angst squeezed in the middle. very cool.

I hope your planning on updating this soon. Its very good! Please dont let it go! please . . . .

welp! time for cookies or maybe ice cream . . . hmmmmmm

DUM DUM DUMMMMMMMMMMMM!
I need to up date the injury/illness list . . . .

Burned
fever
got shot
more fever
almost blown to pieces
memory loss
drugged . . . . . *runs away from laptop to hug Sherlock*

Dialog is a B****! Ugh! Im trying to write stories, Plot comes naturally and my grammar is getting better, but Dialog is sooooooooooooooooooooooo annoying! I swear! I try to make it sound naturally as possible, but man its hard. But ill get there . . .

Anyway! Love the tension between Sherlock and Watson. Its so lovely! Hope things get smoother between the two. Maybe a slashly turn of events? AND CAN YOU PLEASE KILL OF MARY! she is a %#*& pain in the side! She is keeping Watson away from Holmes.

Wait is this a Slash story? Im very confused about that.

This is a very nice chapter. It very well written.

Im saying this because its true and cus I don't know what else to say about this chapter. Im at a loss . . . .

WHAT THE HECK IS GOING ON!

He saved Watson, YAY!

But im soooooo confused. This chapter was confusing. Very good though. But I get he lost his memory. As if he didn't have enough crap going on. Well damn! let the pain continue . . . . im really want to hug Holmes forever and never let go. like ever. The poor guy cant catch a break.

Burns
fever
got shot
more fever
almost blown to pieces
Lost his memory . . . . *grabs Sherlock and never ever lets go*

Poor Holmes cant catch a break. Well at lease he can start walking again.

And what is this item that those people want? You have written quite the caper. Very nice mystery, angst fic. awwwww the angst . . . .

Have what? This is very interesting.

So the part where Watson was healing his shoulder was fake. His imagination . . . I miss Watson too . . . . where is he?