Hi Edhla! I love this little scene. Molly’s desperate love for Sherlock is here, and you pull all of us into it by laying her insecurities bare. How many times have we all looked in the mirror, feeling sure that we weren’t good enough? Adding the bit in about her guilt at using the disabled toilet is painfully lovely. We feel for her AND for ourselves while reading this.

I always thought he was oblivious to most anything that occurred outside his brain. Enjoying the updates!

You capture the thoughts so amazingly well. An extraordinary talent

Aw, poor Sherlock, when is this one set?

I'm SO glad I clicked on this fic! These should have all been canon.

Down with Critics United!

They are the cancer to our society.

The root of heresy needs to be burnt to crisp

with over thousand innocent souls without remorse or guilt thereafter.

No sacrifice is too great and no treachery too small.

Remember, we all are walking under the immortal shadow of Him.

His light shines so brightly, it will guide us to our foreseen destiny that is in our grasp.

A great moment we all should not pass.

Praise Be The Emperor of Mankind!

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And Bella119 is dumb.

Hybrid of Fate is nothing. She needs mental help.

cathrl, do u want to be my daddy? I won't promise to be a good girl :D

CrystalRei should quit.

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But she couldn't bring herself to use the Ladies. People might see. People might see her as she leaned her forehead against the mirror and felt the hard, clammy kiss of glass against her skin, her breath fogging the reflection of her mouth. Her mouth that was too small, even red and swollen as it was from where the paper towel had run roughshod over it.

Tom got here a little before 2:30. T_T

Down with Critics United!

They are the cancer to our society.

The root of heresy needs to be burnt to crisp

with over thousand innocent souls without remorse or guilt thereafter.

No sacrifice is too great and no treachery too small.

Remember, we all are walking under the immortal shadow of Him.

His light shines so brightly, it will guide us to our foreseen destiny that is in our grasp.

A great moment we all should not pass.

Praise Be The Emperor of Mankind!

If you are on the same page, cp this message.

And Bella119 is dumb.

Hybrid of Fate is nothing. She needs mental help.

cathrl, do u want to be my daddy? I won't promise to be a good girl :D

CrystalRei should quit.

Now onto the actual review:
But she couldn't bring herself to use the Ladies. People might see. People might see her as she leaned her forehead against the mirror and felt the hard, clammy kiss of glass against her skin, her breath fogging the reflection of her mouth. Her mouth that was too small, even red and swollen as it was from where the paper towel had run roughshod over it.

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Down with Critics United!

They are the cancer to our society.

The root of heresy needs to be burnt to crisp

with over thousand innocent souls without remorse or guilt thereafter.

No sacrifice is too great and no treachery too small.

Remember, we all are walking under the immortal shadow of Him.

His light shines so brightly, it will guide us to our foreseen destiny that is in our grasp.

A great moment we all should not pass.

Praise Be The Emperor of Mankind!

If you are on the same page, cp this message.

And Bella119 is dumb.

Now onto the actual review:
She screwed the mushy lump of towel in her palm, just for a second; then threw it in a nearby bin, stood up straight, and practiced her best smile for the benefit of her reflection.

Long exposure to both pick-up artists and feminists gave Étienne a disjointed approach to women. O.O

This is so sweet! *happy fangirl noises*

[ Down on his heels beside where the corpse lay unfurled like a flower fallen from a bouquet] - Im not a fan of this line in this context. Maybe because it's a Lestrade chapter and he's not quite the poetic kind, or maybe it just needs to be a little *less*. [ Down on his heels beside where the corpse lay unfurled like a flower]? Maybe. I'm not sure! I shall leave it to your capable hands to work out whether this is personal opinion or valid :D

Lestrade is my favourite of characters, so I'm biased towards loving this chapter ;) it doesn't do as much character-wise or description-wise as the previous chapters, and there are no flashes of insight into him that we don't already know, but it IS very Lestrade and I love it for that. Great work! I shall return-hopefully tomorrow!-with another batch of reviews on this awesome piece :D

[Philip Anderson was leaning in the bathroom doorway, watching Sally Donovan put her bra back on.] - this bit here felt a bit clumsy. It felt out of place, since we're sort of in Sally's head a little here, and this was very suddenly out of any of their heads. And you're skilled enough that we just KNOW who the characters are through your descriptions and their voices, so I believe that there are much more delicate ways you can word this!

Ahaha poor Anderson. He is just naturally creepy, isn't he? And Sally is a sassmaster here, I dig it. These little snippets of what we don't see are wonderful :)

Oh man. I love love love love love this. I want you to know that I SUCK and I'm no longer reviewing these as a review trade participant, but genuinely because I really love these little snippets into the episodes. And the improvement from your very early stuff is so amazing that I can barely find things to comment upon to improve anyway! Almost everything I've pointed out before as something you could work on, you've done so!

Well done and I am eagerly moving onto the next chapter. There's a melancholy kind of scene-setting in this one that I absolutely adore and am jealous of.

[Sherlock threw his arms around her, squeezing her out of breath.] - this sentence reads a little awkward to me-I think it needs a bit of rewording/mixing around just to make it flow a little smoother.

Oh and you've NAILED Mrs. Hudson here, I love it. I'm getting all kinds of Sherlocky emotions from this and it's making ME want to go and write something for Sherlock now. Her voice is perfect, how she runs right through from 'irritated with Sherlock' to making him coffee and smiling about him. I love her so much. And I'm really loving these short little snippets into the characters-you get the voices JUST right in them and it's truly a delight to read!

Hello! I'm back! Sorry for the long wait-I literally just finished my last exam yesterday, so here I am once more and so excited to be here :D

Oh man oh man oh man, you know how I always blather about opening lines? The whole opening PARAGRAPH of this chapter, I love it so so so much. Like, I've read it five times now just to try and tell you WHY I love it so much, but I can't find the words to actually verbalize why.

[Guilt nipped at her chest. It was wrong of her to monopolise the disabled toilet when she didn't need it.] - god this whole thing is... just so MOLLY. Like. You've nailed her personality in a cool 500 words or so, and I love it so much. Is it odd that I think this might be my favourite thing of yours I've read yet?

And my heart is breaking :( I have no critique for this piece because I think it's perfect as it is. I love it, well done!

just read this all in one go. No idea why i haven't read this earlier. They are brilliant and deliver some good insights for some scenes and your longer stories.